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Re: Our Unrealistic Society
Hello there! Whatgoescomes here to review. I often play with this idea, you layed it out very well. Some of your phrasing sounds a little akward it could be just ...
Jan 13, 2016 -
Re: Dystopia for the Common Man
Hello there Whatgoescomes here! Okay this may sound rude but without the title this poem would be just a lot of pretty verses with no connection at all. Which is ...
Jan 13, 2016 -
Re: Help! I need an title for this piece!!
Heeeeeeello again! This one is a bit longer. I enjoyed reading it tough. Before I forget I want to mention I like the their relationship in parallel with William Shakespeare ...
Dec 29, 2015 -
Re: Silver Fish
Hello there Whatgoescomes here!! mmmmmm First off I love how while reading this you get a calm peaceful feeling from reading this poem. I like how the last lines rhyme ...
Dec 29, 2015 -
Re: Coming to you
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Dec 28, 2015 -
Re: Self harm
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Dec 28, 2015 -
Re: Puppy love
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Dec 28, 2015 -
Re: End it
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Dec 28, 2015 -
Re: Late Night Text
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Dec 28, 2015 -
Re: Good-bye
fe;llllll lllllllll llllllll nlkfd gkv oirjgoij hlkslk aghlk h hj gr hg dhlghklf dhf d hfd glkhl ksfh hjgf klgfg hjg h gldlh ghjghjg gfhghgf hgfgfh gfhlgsdh gfhjgfh ghjgf hgf ...
Dec 28, 2015 -
Re: Fallen Angel
great job!
Dec 28, 2015 -
Re: Bottles
Whatgoescomes here! This is my first time reading a script on here. It is pretty good plot, it evokes all sorts of emotions, and handles all sorts of problems. Boarder ...
Dec 28, 2015 -
Re: Toys
Hello, there. That was really pretty in a weird way. I like the flow and how some of the verses rhymed. The theme is interesting to, forgotten toys. It reminds ...
Dec 28, 2015 -
Re: Writer's Block
Hello there hmm. I like this but I think you should fix the formatting a bit. I think if you had lines five and six together it would help the ...
Dec 28, 2015