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Great job! I have read so many of your poems, and the way it is written, I can just tell you wrote it!

I really like this poem, not much to point out apart from the fact that it's "breathe" and not "breath," sorry I don't want to nitpick and I know it's mistakes. But so far so good!

This poem is filed with a tone of emotion, which is really good. I don't write poetry myself, but I know a good one when I see one. This was a good story of someone who has no will to live, yet keeps trying to help/save others. Great work! I want to read more like this.
You have defiantly earned a follow!

-Ryleigh

Well, Hi, Fancy or Dragon? xD

This one's really fantastic. And, relatable. I loved the format, the words you've used and the concept. Cool.

I loved these-

"Don’t run from me

But you need to live for you

Not for them"

I'm running away every day from probably everything, it's not good i know but, i can't help myself. i can't tell how much possibilities I've lost for this very nature. and now, this one-

"Fight other’s fights

But can’t fight your own"

Again, it somehow relating to me. I always to help myself when I am fighting for others sometimes but, they don't even remember you know.

Anyway, nothing to critique on. Good writing. Good read for me.

Best of luck. Stay fine and in fun!

~Min

Hey!!

So, let me just say, I love the tone and voice the best in this poem as well as the fact that you repeated the last and first few lines. Don't fret...this is awesome!! Great job at being able to do this!!!

I saw no grammatical or spelling or puntuational errors. Good job!!

You can REALLY write poetry! I love that this doesn't even have to rhyme to make it good and this is something I like about this work. Not all poets or poetry can do this. You did perfectly.

I love the message you are sending. Well, not in that way. Let me rephrase it. I love the way you....got your message across to your audience! You didn't use huge words, yet you used words bigger than just an infant's understanding.

So, I applaud you.
Great job!!

Keep writing!!,
~Tiff

Tag, you're it again!
This sad, and so relatable. My favorite line is,
"Fight other’s fights

But can’t fight your own" because that's totally me. Always fighting others battles, and never helping myself. Bleh .-.

On to my review part! I see where I think you meant to have stanza breaks, but they aren't there. If you have the same problem as me, not being able to put empty lines, try putting a line or something as stanza breaks.

Another thing I noticed is there is no pauses at all. It would be impossible to read out-loud, remember that an end of a line doesn't mean a pause! Punctuation is needed in poetry too!

Other than that you did a great job!

- Phoenix