Sylar

The only reason I'm a "co-author" is because I LOANED you some points. But this was, okay. "isolated in my own little world of never seeing the beautifully colored sky." ...

This was really deep :P. I'm getting into dark poetry, and this was really good! I love your dark tone. "Coldness drills deep" I think this line stops the flow ...

I really loved this poem. I thought it was really sweet, and I hope you grandmother has a great birthday. In May :) "with the reds and oranges." This line ...

Okay, I'm going to review this. Really. Now, I love this. Because it's funny, but you actually need to fix some things. "I walk through the school hallways... No!" Okay, ...

So, I see it's a little hard to write an actual review for something that's just four lines and only twenty words, but I will try. We need to get ...

This was a really great piece! You have a nice tone, and, overall, it wasn't lacking in many areas. "And the clouds are AWOL- glare!" What? What does AWOL mean? ...

I really loved this piece! I think you have a nice voice, but you can fix a few things. "My mind that warned is laughing." What? I don't really understand ...

I really quite enjoyed this essay! You had a nice comical tone, and I was hooked from the beginning. Just a note though, you should rate this 16+ for language. ...

This was a really nice essay! It was a little short, but it was quite enjoyable. "An apt example is JK Rowling who was a single mother living in a ...

Now I know I already talked about this in writing class (and I know it's only two paragraphs for me to review), but I thought I'd do a proper review ...

This was a great second chapter and I hope you put more up soon! First, I think it should be longer. I dunno how, but it's a fair amount shorter ...

I really enjoyed this first chapter and I can't wait to read more. "withered to a faint humming and the shotgun nothing more than a rattle." The shotgun "what" nothing ...

I thought this was a really nice and eerie piece. Although, there were a few things I didn't like. First, the numbering. I think you should take that out. It ...

I quite enjoyed this poem. First, let's talk about this I didn't like. "I am here, in this moment, the very definition of all hell, frozen over" Why did you ...

Wow, I really loved this! With the help of YWS, I'm learning to enjoy poetry more. And this was, awesome. There are just a few issues. First, your capitalization is ...