Rydia

Hi there! 1. I'm not sure about the second line of this, though it could be personal preference because I really dislike the word perfect except when used to be ...

Hey buddy! It's good to see you're still playing with this short form of poetry - I think you're good at it! What I might suggest for this one is ...

Hullo! 1. I think rather than of yesterday that from yesterday would sound better as it would continue the sort of f sound you have with flimsy and threads. 2. ...

This is really cute! Stanza 1: I like the end and beginning of the poem but I'm a little unsure about the use of 'what' because it's so vague and ...

Hello! Specifics 1. This sounds like a slam poem to me or at the least one of the ones you read out loud to an audience. It has a good ...

Hey, thought I'd take a look at this. I think rather than starting out with what is kind of the punch line of your poem, that should come at the ...

I've not reviewed lyrics in a while so why not! Specifics 1. Reminders that she's everywhere but here You didn't sing the that in this line and I think that ...

I didn't get to look at much poetry on review day so I'm going to grab this one while it's still in the green room. Specifics 1. The first stanza ...

Hullo! Specifics 1. Did you use was instead of were in the first line on purpose? It sounds a little awkward so there were the daisies may flow better. 2. ...

Hey there! Specifics 1. Whatever the cartoon is, I secretly hope that Sydnie had has forgotten about the talk she wanted to have with me. I can hear Sydnie tussling ...

Hullo! Specifics 1. If there was a report on amusement parks so early in the evening, it meant that nothing had happened in his absence from the streets as the ...

Hello, dear! Thought I'd take a look at this :) Specifics 1. “You know, I’ll try to talk to her about it,” replied Matthew, standing up and finishing the rest ...

Happy review day! Specifics 1. The smell of the stew I was creating filled my nostrils, a mixture of rosemary, pumpkin, mutton, and broth. When Sparrow had come back from ...

Hello! Thought I'd take a look at this as you suggested team-mate :) Specifics 1. "Now, now, darling, it's quite the woeful sight to watch you struggle at those chains ...

I owe you a proper review from the other night and doubly so after all your hard work to bring Potter within sight of those Grangers! So here goes... Specifics ...