Rydia

The context of this poem is good and it is a difficult issue to cover but I do feel that you could have used a stronger format. As Snoink says, ...

Just a quick critique on this one I think. Let me see.... The first thing I noticed is that 'morn' should be mourn is you mean to mourn someone's passing. ...

Okay, I got some spare time on my hands so I shall go through it and outline the typos and spelling mistakes as well as a few possible changes.... Oh ...

The first thing I'd like to point out is a slight lack of punctuation. I know I'm forever nagging people about this but I really do think a poetry needs ...

My first impression of this poem is that I like it. It has something of a pessimistic tone and for a long time I went through that phase, I'm not ...

The first thing I'd like to see you do with this poem is to add some capital letters. I think a poem looks much more professional and much neater if ...

Just a few points to add to that rather thorough critique. I think that, seenas you don't appear to have a rhythm, you might as well use 'instead' rather than ...

Okay, overall I got a very varied impression for this poem but the message is good and parts are very well written. In the first verse, I agree that nought ...

Sometimes a lack of punctuation can be effective but, as I often say, it's best in small doses so use a little more. Also, you could expand this piece. It's ...

I don't think the opening of the first is very strong and there's a typo. The eighth line should be 'you're' rather than 'your' Hmmm. Other than that the ideas ...

I don't usually see what's so effective about Haikus but you managed to say a lot in just a few lines so well done you! The language is rather simple ...

Hmmm. My first point is that you have a lack of punctuation and should probably add more. I must agree with Whence on the starting with a cliche but I ...

Both of this poems have potential but they're a little short and they need to be written in poetry form. Try to form a structure and then mold the words ...

I quite liked the rhyme actually except that it seemed forced in places and the repetition was effective but it was rather a lot to repeat. Perhaps yu should have ...

I think this poem flowed really well and the rhythm and rhyme were perfect but you switched tense for a single line in the middle - The leaves continued to ...