Okay, can i start by saying I loved the repetition in the last to lines *applaudes*. However, I have some minor cirticisms...
1)In the line 'Of fairy tales of yore' there are one too many 'of's'.
2)Nought is definitely not a word in the context you are using it in.
3)'For activities' somehow, this line does not fit. might I suggest using something which requires more words possibly friends, but i am not sure.
I enjoyed reading it though, it left me feeling all warm inside...
~SishBee~
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