Repose

Recycledsoul; First off, I love your username, haha! Anyways, back to business: I liked it, I liked it a lot! I'd like to tell you that I don't particularly correct ...

Miss Rydia; Too be quite honest, don't know whether I love it or dislike it. I'm a bit confused. I think it's mostly because I have not yet been through ...

SharraeWilson; Ah, very nice. Just a few mistakes I was to point out real quick: "My emotions are very high. When I see a friend cry." - I really don't ...

Hmm, instresting way of starting off your novel. This must be the prolgue, I assume. Well, keep me posted. The title is good and that's always a good start! I ...

Miss Roxyask c: First off, I loved the title. It definitely caught my eye and now I will read . . . My, my, very impressive! I usually save my ...

Shoaib; Brilliant. When I finished reading this absolutely engaging poem all I could think was: Brilliant! Your words had me a the throat, I couldn't stop reading through. It started ...

Miss Roxyask; Ah, hello again, my dear! Overall, it was good. There were some normal errors such as: "because Iam scared of the rejection" - Iam should be 'I am' ...

Clarity; Good Morning (well, where I am at least!). I'm going to start off with saying that I really don't pay very much attention to grammatical errors to much myself, ...

Screamandshout; Wow. Just wow. I am completely and honestly astounded. I don't know where to begin, in fact. Just the way you set it up has be blown away! This ...

KYKYBHADD; First of all welcome to YWS and congrats on posting your first piece. I'd like to start off with saying that you did make many grammatical mistakes, but since ...

BrokenSkye; When I began to read this poem it started off typical - like something I'd heard more than a million times. But, as I read on, I saw the ...

Qmj; A little more structure (as mentioned) would definitly help this poem out. But, beside the fact it's very sporadic, it's quite cute. Although the 'yu' bothered me a little. ...

Pensword; The topic was an interesting one. I can see potential by just the words you use and how you arranged them. Favorite Lines: "he comforts the man with cradled ...

EllieArden; My! Very impressive if I do say so. There may have been a few awkward lines like: "I am the clock" and "And I miss you." But they looked ...

Angadsingh; I have to be honest with you here, dear. The poem felt awkward to read in some places like: My feelings were beautiful but benefits were lame Ultimately became ...