Skugga Man

I have no problem with the lack of punctuation or capitalization, I don't think poems need it, they can be written however the writer feels will best tell their story. The only thing I question is this part:

"and as the sun crawls slowly near
the man of jet retreats in fear

man and his shadow"

The second line, doesn't really make sense, and it seems like it's missing a line with the space, especially since the last line seems out of context and doesn't rhyme with anything so it seems out of place.

"sees the patrons get up and yawn"

This line is a bit choppy and doesn't sound quite right. But I don't see how that can be changed or fixed so... I guess that's it. Haha. I really loved this one as well. You really are quite good at creating a picture. It was great.
~ Nightlyowl

I applaude thee! This is good. A few things I would suggest to you:

Grammar:
With some poems, leaving everything lower case works (I don't ever really like it, but it does work on rare occasion). With yours, I think it would add to it if you properly capitalized the beginnings of lines where it needs it and putting some punctualization at the end of lines (commas, periods, semicolons, etc).

Flow:
Your flow is fantastic, the rhyming slips off my tongue easily and you avoided the awkward forced words that come with some rhyming poems. Great job! Also, I would just take out Man and his shadow at the end. It's simply not needed.

Overall, I love this! After some fixing up it would be even better. Keep writing, I can't wait to see more of your work. I see that you are new to the site, so if you have any questions, feel free to message me.
~Kay

I really loved the beginning of this poem; it really drew me in to read on. The overall tone was wonderful, and I loved that it was really dripping with great imagery. I would, however, suggest some minor punctuation throughout and also capitalization of line beginnings. Some noteworthy lines:

and as the man gets up to go
the darker one becomes the foe
he follows him, a silent tail
the watcher clothed in jet-black mail

At first this really didn't work for me simply because I didn't know there was another definition for "mail". Only after I looked up other definitions and found that it is a type of armor did I realize that it does indeed work! Also:

but man of ebon senses dawn
sees the patrons get up and yawn
he knows his death is near at hand
he has not long in mortal land

This stanza is a bit confusing--why does he know his death is near? Is that suppose to be ambiguous to the reader? There are a lot of questions that these lines leave me with.

Pensword;

The topic was an interesting one. I can see potential by just the words you use and how you arranged them. Favorite Lines:
"he comforts the man with cradled gin
a comrade in likeness, a partner in sin"
These lines really caught my eye because no only does it explore a taboo way of thinking but it also can directly relate back to a shadow. Impressive.

But there were a few odd parts I'd like to point out as well such as your stressed ryhming. For example:
"he follows him, a silent tail
the watcher clothed in jet-black mail"
and
"flickers once, a blackened flame
cuts the light in devil's name"

In these lines I can tell there seemed to be a struggle in 'finding the right words' - bumps in the road, if you will. Just becareful to avoid awkward phrases. I know you feel the urge to get 'gibber-ishy' when writing poetry, but remember: the audience still has to understand the message you're trying to get across.

Keep up the writing, dear!

A poem about shadows... LOVE IT! This was something really cool to write about, and you did it reasonably well. Of coarse, capitalization and punctuation are pretty important elements of a poem. I do not care so much for grammar, though, so I won't hammer you on it. Nice job!

Keep up the shadowy work! (he he, get it?)
Peace out!

Well I must say this isn't that bad. But you don't have any capital letters anywhere! Nor do you have any punctuation! Any even worse mistake is the constant use of contractions. Words like "but, and, and also" are a waste of space in a poem. Any way you did good, for a rookie.