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Re: You Fear What You Don't Understand
This is a great poem. I love that you don't really rhyme, but it is very much together and it is beautiful. It has a very nice image and a ...
Jan 28, 2013 -
Re: The Threshold of Filth
A coincidence, pehaps, For him to look into one of the cities gaps. Where the weak draw smoke for heaven, While their minds and bodies collapse. This is quite a ...
Jan 28, 2013 -
Re: Amour
Flowing through gentle streams, tumble down amorous dreams. Illuminating virgin delight, take me down to heaven tonight. Your rhyming and scheme are very well composed here. I can already see ...
Jan 27, 2013 -
Re: All Thanks to You
I really felt a good and strong emotion emitting from the first stanza. You have a really, really good idea here. Your wording and rhyming a superb. A few things ...
Sep 21, 2012 -
Re: Places, Faces, and Their Tales
I like how you nicely thought this thing out. Your rhyming is very good, and so is your grammar. This poem has a good story to it. Although, it seems ...
Sep 20, 2012 -
Re: The Lightbulb
Nice job....I like the subject matter. Although, I do feel as though you could make it better by adding more. I feel as though the end comes to quickly. I ...
Sep 20, 2012 -
Re: A Whispered Lullaby
Hello again, W&W! I like the way this whole thing fits together. Your flow is very nicely done. One thing I will say is.... "A night so far away, The ...
Aug 1, 2012 -
Re: The Dark Side Of Dreaming
Really, really good job here!! I love how you didn't really worry about rhyming, but made it all flow so well just by getting the syllables and form correct. I ...
Jul 26, 2012 -
Re: Behind The Glass
Amazing, OrangeTigers. Wonderful emotion, great rhyming, and an altogether satisfactory flow. I am not sure if this was an accident or not, but I suggest you form your poem here ...
Jul 26, 2012 -
Re: Picture perfect memories
Hello, I'm here to review this poem for you today (: I like the story idea. It has amazing potential! I will say, though, that it sounds more like a ...
Jul 23, 2012 -
Re: The Mouse
Wonderful, wonderful work here. I love your light-hearted feeling! It's very sweet and charming. I like your format. I agree with MorningStar, that the fifth stanza is odd. I think ...
Jul 23, 2012 -
Re: Rhythm and I
Very nice. A haiku, I believe? I like your style. This is an amusing poem with good feel, I like the shortness and crispness of it all. Good work here, ...
Jul 23, 2012 -
Re: Uprising
Hello again! Roses bloom in dark dank wells. Hidden , happy, anger swells. Cowards from danger shall flee. Trust means death, do not trust me. This stanza is extremely well ...
Jul 23, 2012 -
Re: just longing...
Nicely done, W&W. I don't usually review romantic styled poetry, but I'll give it a go. I like the shortness of it. It gives it a refreshed, new feel. Your ...
Jul 22, 2012 -
Re: What am I suppose to DO ?
Hey, Jolene. I have just a few pointers for you... First of all, I think you should take away the bullets. It makes it look like a list of items, ...
Jul 22, 2012
