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Re: The rose’s thorns
This is a good piece, Cailey! Use of simple words or not, this poem was broken down very nicely! Good job! :) My favorite lines were these: "The rose’s thorns ...
Sep 17, 2011 -
Re: Fiery Love
This is a pretty good poem, leeanna13097! However, just a few suggestions: try to go for some punctuation, because it's difficult to get the full effect of your poem without ...
Jul 28, 2011 -
Re: Praying For A Miracle.
This is great, Anwesha! Your diction is simply wonderful here! My favorite lines are these: "A flowing river of dreadful thoughts, An endless string of things I sought, but never ...
Jul 27, 2011 -
Re: Best Friends
I like this, livurdestiny! It clearly shows who your real friends/enemies! My favorite part is this line: "Friends will pick you up once you fall but Best Friends- Will push ...
Jul 27, 2011 -
Re: The End
This is pretty intense, jknudsen! Here's a few suggestions though: "Tattoos cover my body, recognition of my sorrow, Sadly , it's time to let go... (add a comma after sadly) ...
Jul 5, 2011 -
Re: Bird
Touching poem, KelsRich1! This is very reminiscent of Kelly Clarkson's song, "Breakaway"; I like how this poem reminds me of it! I see you already fixed your punctuation errors, so ...
Jul 5, 2011 -
Re: Cancer
Hey KatTrain, this poem was pretty intense! These lines gripped me the most: "Daddy, I don't know what to do anymore, my tears hold silent congress on the floor, they ...
May 26, 2011 -
Re: The End
Hey there, Flower~Child! Overall, I really enjoyed this piece! What stood out for me in particular though was this stanza: "I listen to the invisible clock waiting for the minute ...
May 26, 2011 -
Re: Take Flight
Allie, this is a very cute poem! The rhyme scheme is well executed, and the message you're conveying is something I can truly admire! I actually think that this poem ...
May 24, 2011 -
Re: My Dreams
A simple piece, but very, very heartfelt! I like the reassurance you give yourself at the end of the poem: "My dreams. They will keep on living, After my time." ...
May 24, 2011 -
Re: Could You?
Hello, dreamsingray! Overall, I think this a nice little poem! I find the length appropriate and a universal message that everyone can relate to! However, my only criticism is in ...
May 22, 2011 -
Re: Joy
This poem is very refreshing! I like it a lot! However, the only problem I see are the random parts in your stanzas where you randomly un-capitalize words at the ...
May 22, 2011 -
Re: Flying
This poem is very reminiscent of a dream! Your word choices were absolutely perfect, and your flow was flawless! My favorite lines were these: "Then I break through, and see ...
Apr 22, 2011 -
Re: The Last Petal
This is a very profound poem! Dark, too! That's what I enjoy reading the most! :) My favorite lines were these: "It's such a mournful sound, and death creeps in ...
Apr 22, 2011 -
Re: Beneath the Smile
MissRockers, this is a wonderfully crafted poem! The flow, rhyme scheme, appearance--EVERYTHING was perfectly executed! I honestly have nothing to point out! "Every day of the week she puts on ...
Apr 18, 2011
