Best Friends

by livurdestiny

Published July 27, 2011

Best friends- The ones that you can only be mad for an hour because you have important stuff to tell them
Best Friends- Only make you cry from laughing to hard
Best Friends- Will tell you the truth no matter how hard it hurts
Friends will pick you up once you fall but
Best Friends- Will push you back down and you will laugh about it.
Best Friends- Are for eternity
Best Friends- Make life bloom There always there to share you doom
Best Friends- Make life bloom
They help and share you gloom
Best Friends- Make life bloom :smt023

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Thehorror Review
Thehorror wrote a review Review · Aug 12, 2011

HI!!!!!!!!
I must say, this poem truly defines the meaning of best friends!! one can clearly see how this explains a relationship between friends which can be explained as true friends, who are made for each other and stand there when one needs other. though it don't sound like a lyrical poem much, but I like the message behind. good work!!! keep writing!!!!!
good luck my friend!! bye!!!!

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KattieCurtis
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KattieCurtis wrote a review Review · Aug 11, 2011

I love this, my best friends moving away in a few weeks and everything in this poem reminds me off her because its all so true, she's always the one to tell me the truth whether I want to hear it or not, I'll get mad before realising she's right :)

Best friends- The ones that you can only be mad for an hour because you have important stuff to tell them Best Friends- Only make you cry from laughing to hard Best Friends- Will tell you the truth no matter how hard it hurts


Very well written and so relatable :)

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MissRockers
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MissRockers wrote a review Review · Aug 5, 2011

This was a cute poem! :) I loved it. Near the end, I think you kind of got desperate for rhyming words though. It's just what I thought. Keep writing!! I think the others picked up on grammar!

My favorite lines:

Best friends- The ones that you can only be mad for an hour because you have important stuff to tell them
Best Friends- Only make you cry from laughing to hard

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PoeticGlow
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PoeticGlow wrote a review Review · Jul 27, 2011

I like this, livurdestiny! It clearly shows who your real friends/enemies! My favorite part is this line:

"Friends will pick you up once you fall but
Best Friends- Will push you back down and you will laugh about it."

Beautiful! Keep it up!

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CCwriterXD
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CCwriterXD commented Comment · Jul 27, 2011

It makes me really think about who I have as a best friend. I'm making quite a few changes as I'm getting older and I like how that can really apply to real life:D Keep up the good work! ~C.C.

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livurdestiny
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livurdestiny commented Comment · Jul 27, 2011

thanks

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confetti
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confetti wrote a review Review · Jul 27, 2011

Best friends- The ones that you can only be mad for an hour because you have important stuff to tell them
Best Friends- Only make you cry from laughing to This should be "too" hard
Best Friends- Will tell you the truth no matter how hardTurning "hard" into "much" here would make more sense it hurts
Friends will pick you up once you fall but
Best Friends- Will push you back down and you will laugh about it.
Best Friends- Are for eternity
Best Friends- Make life bloom There This should be "They're" as in "They are"always there to share you doom
Best Friends- Make life bloom
They help and share your gloom
Best Friends- Make life bloom


Just a few grammatical errors, but this was very sweet.

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livurdestiny
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livurdestiny commented Comment · Jul 27, 2011

Thank you and I will take your advice and change my poem

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Crimsona
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Crimsona wrote a review Review · Jul 27, 2011

Very sweet poem. As another reviewer said, the 'make life bloom' was a little repetetive, but apart from that it was a cute and touching poem. I'd split it in half though, just because it's quick a big chunk to read. Also, some of your lines end in punctuation, but some don't; it doesn't really matter if you choose to have punctuation at the end of the line or not but whatever you choose to do, I'd keep it consistent. (I'd probably suggest you choosing to go with punctuation at the end of each.

Keep writing,

~Crim

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livurdestiny
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livurdestiny commented Comment · Jul 27, 2011

Thank you for the piece of advice and I reviewed your works to

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lele253isme commented Comment · Jul 27, 2011

I love this its so good. the last part not so much, because the bloom and gloom, and the oom was sort of repetitive, you know. but other than that the facts stated in this are very true. Keep up the good work!!!



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