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Re: Drama Of My Life-Drama In The Summertime: Chapter 3
I really do love this story! And thank you for not having any cellphone calls in this one! Even though you have a lot of work to do in term ...
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Re: Drama Of My Life-Drama In The Summertime: Chapter 2
I really do like this story a lot despite the MANY,MANY,MANY,MANY, mistakes here. It's fun to read but doesn't really serve any purpose here to tell you the truth. It ...
Jun 24, 2012 -
Re: Chroma - Chapter 2
Good job on this! I really enjoyed reading this! And it sounds so professional! I liked the characters in the story, especially the MC! Spitting out bad words like a ...
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Re: Practice Makes Perfect
This story was really funny. And I liked the POV you did. The nine-year old girl. To me me, this sounds almost like a children's book but the writing more ...
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Re: stop it
Um...this is dead scary to me...but very well written. It's a classic pouring out of emotions and feelings and descriptions and imagery. I see a lot of potential in you. ...
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Re: Reveal A Character
Fantastic! This was a really good character sketch! And I like Charlie...he's deep and has a lot of things going for him right now... You have some errors that I ...
Jun 24, 2012 -
Re: Drama Of My Life-Schools In Chapter 1
Good job doing this! I wanted to read this because of all the NEW and DIFFERENT things in here! Being an author, your basic instinct should be to appeal to ...
Jun 24, 2012 -
Re: The Hermit Crabs
Beautiful! I'm not going to make this long. 1. The stanzas were non-existent I think you should make this proper: She never stayed stillĀ For longĀ She knew she had ...
Jun 24, 2012 -
Re: Karma
Okay, aqua here to review. Keep thinking about the length of your poem because readers might not be that interested in it. I liked the cleanliness of the poem and ...
Jun 24, 2012 -
Re: Taking Risks
Sigh...Beautiful piece...I commend you. I absolutely loved this piece to tell you the truth. I didn't find anything wrong with it except for some spelling errors and some punctuation mistakes. ...
Jun 24, 2012 -
Re: It's nobody.
This was a really good piece of writing! I absolutely LOVED your use of descriptions and similes of sorts in this! Now...stanza by stanza, I will review this. "My name ...
Jun 24, 2012 -
Re: love theory
Love Theory. First, capitalize your title. It's not necessary but still... Second, capitalize everything else. We lingered in the lamp-lit backseat. I esteemed myself his bohemian mistress of lust and
Jun 24, 2012 -
Re: Gullible
This was really good! The emotions just flowed out like...crazy! Even though rhyme scheme is practically non-existent, this didn't need it. At all. P.S Not being sarcastic. At all.
Jun 24, 2012 -
Re: Kidnapped, pt. 2
Woah. Deep. But you probably could have extended it more; made us really experience the hardships the MC faced through instead of giving us a slightly summarized type of story... ...
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Re: Good Mothers Give Hope
Okay, this piece is purely religious. Let me review, line by line... "Good Mothers Give Their Children Hope" Very true... And I like that you split that wonderful HOPE into ...
Jun 24, 2012
