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  • Novel / Chapter » Teen Fiction, Realistic Re: Drama Of My Life-Drama In The Summertime: Chapter 3

    I really do love this story! And thank you for not having any cellphone calls in this one! Even though you have a lot of work to do in term ...

    Jun 24, 2012
  • Novel / Chapter » Dramatic, Teen Fiction Re: Drama Of My Life-Drama In The Summertime: Chapter 2

    I really do like this story a lot despite the MANY,MANY,MANY,MANY, mistakes here. It's fun to read but doesn't really serve any purpose here to tell you the truth. It ...

    Jun 24, 2012
  • Novel / Chapter » Science Fiction, Supernatural Re: Chroma - Chapter 2

    Good job on this! I really enjoyed reading this! And it sounds so professional! I liked the characters in the story, especially the MC! Spitting out bad words like a ...

    Jun 24, 2012
  • Other » General, Humor Re: Practice Makes Perfect

    This story was really funny. And I liked the POV you did. The nine-year old girl. To me me, this sounds almost like a children's book but the writing more ...

    Jun 24, 2012
  • Poetry » General, General Re: stop it

    Um...this is dead scary to me...but very well written. It's a classic pouring out of emotions and feelings and descriptions and imagery. I see a lot of potential in you. ...

    Jun 24, 2012
  • Other » Teen Fiction, General Re: Reveal A Character

    Fantastic! This was a really good character sketch! And I like Charlie...he's deep and has a lot of things going for him right now... You have some errors that I ...

    Jun 24, 2012
  • Novel / Chapter » Realistic, Fantasy Re: Drama Of My Life-Schools In Chapter 1

    Good job doing this! I wanted to read this because of all the NEW and DIFFERENT things in here! Being an author, your basic instinct should be to appeal to ...

    Jun 24, 2012
  • Poetry » Romantic, Realistic Re: The Hermit Crabs

    Beautiful! I'm not going to make this long. 1. The stanzas were non-existent I think you should make this proper: She never stayed stillĀ  For longĀ  She knew she had ...

    Jun 24, 2012
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Karma

    Okay, aqua here to review. Keep thinking about the length of your poem because readers might not be that interested in it. I liked the cleanliness of the poem and ...

    Jun 24, 2012
  • Short Story » Mystery / Suspense, Narrative Re: Taking Risks

    Sigh...Beautiful piece...I commend you. I absolutely loved this piece to tell you the truth. I didn't find anything wrong with it except for some spelling errors and some punctuation mistakes. ...

    Jun 24, 2012
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: It's nobody.

    This was a really good piece of writing! I absolutely LOVED your use of descriptions and similes of sorts in this! Now...stanza by stanza, I will review this. "My name ...

    Jun 24, 2012
  • Poetry » Romantic, General Re: love theory

    Love Theory. First, capitalize your title. It's not necessary but still... Second, capitalize everything else. We lingered in the lamp-lit backseat. I esteemed myself his bohemian mistress of lust and

    Jun 24, 2012
  • Poetry » Narrative, Dramatic Re: Gullible

    This was really good! The emotions just flowed out like...crazy! Even though rhyme scheme is practically non-existent, this didn't need it. At all. P.S Not being sarcastic. At all.

    Jun 24, 2012
  • Novel / Chapter » Horror, Mystery / Suspense Re: Kidnapped, pt. 2

    Woah. Deep. But you probably could have extended it more; made us really experience the hardships the MC faced through instead of giving us a slightly summarized type of story... ...

    Jun 24, 2012
  • Poetry » Realistic, General Re: Good Mothers Give Hope

    Okay, this piece is purely religious. Let me review, line by line... "Good Mothers Give Their Children Hope" Very true... And I like that you split that wonderful HOPE into ...

    Jun 24, 2012


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