Morrigan

Hi there. It's interesting, to say the least. Lots of descriptive words. I'm going to classify this as a kind of stream of consciousness poem. The words all tumbling over ...

Hi there. An interesting view. One part hit me in the gut (in a good way): I'd like to swear, but I'm afraid; When they said Freedom of Speech, I ...

Hi there. It's definitely very interesting and thought provoking. I won't say I like it because it makes me feel uneasy. I suppose that's what you were going for. But ...

Hi there. I agree with Benway. It's nice and straightforward. I have some suggestions that would make this piece better. First, grammar corrections: -Im should be "I'm" throughout the whole ...

Hi there. I like it. It's short and to the point. And it's got some interesting images going on as well. "in the wash bin I shed my skin like ...

Hey there. This is pretty. I like your meter. Nice word choice, dude. I don't have that many suggestions, not only because this is a short poem, but because it's ...

Hey there. I like it. I especially like how you keep the same phrase with different variations. Repetition isn't my thing, but a central theme or image is, and you ...

Hi, Ree! I like your imagery. Also one of my favorite parts is "poised to please" because it's an alliteration and it shows something about the speaker of those words. ...

Hi there, Eric. Welcome to YWS. I like your imagery. It's interesting. Also, it's a relatable theme you've got going on here. My favorite lines are the first two. It ...

Hey there. Lots of rhetorical questions. Cool beans. I like them. My favorite line is the second to last one. "the loss of a lover's dream" has a really nice ...

Hey there. I agree with noninjaspresent-- you should stick this in the poetry category. It's powerful. And it really gives me something to think about. I don't know if you're ...

Hey there. I have a question. Why isn't this in the novel section? You need to continue it. It looks like it would be an pretty decent novel. Of course, ...

Hey there. Is what you're talking about your profile picture? I like it. Lots of pretty images and colors. A nice descriptive piece. I do have a few suggestions for ...

Hi there. First of all, I'm sorry for your loss. It must be hard. Second of all, I see you're new. Welcome to YWS. I like how you divide the ...

Hey there. Returning the favor of a review. Interesting. It took me a few times through to understand what it was about, but I got it (I'm pretty slow on ...