Hollow Ruin

Hi there.

It's definitely very interesting and thought provoking. I won't say I like it because it makes me feel uneasy. I suppose that's what you were going for. But I do appreciate it. It's pretty well written.

I do have a few suggestions for improvement.
In the first stanza, you're asking questions, yet there are no question marks. These questions could also be ended in different ways. I could read it like this:

Where were you
When they stormed
Your home,
When they stole and ravaged
Your All?
Who told you
How It happened
In the grinning, sadistic darkness?

Or this:

Where were you?
When they stormed
Your home,
When they stole and ravaged
Your All,
Who told you
How It happened
In the grinning, sadistic darkness?

Or this:

Where were you
When they stormed
Your home?
When they stole and ravaged
Your All,
Who told you
How It happened
In the grinning, sadistic darkness?

The three ways that I was able to read it all read differently. It would make it clearer if you did one of these three or found another way to punctuate it. But no matter what, I suggest more punctuation in the first stanza.

"In the grinning, sadistic darkness" I feel like you could find a more concrete image to describe the darkness. I think a metaphor of some kind is in order here. Here's what I would say (though you definitely should look for your own metaphor): "In the panther darkness." if you think about it, panthers are black, they are predators, so they kill and eat things. If you describe something with another noun, it's really cool, because you put all the adjectives of the describing noun and put them towards the noun being described (sorry if I'm rambling).

"Can you feel/ The loss?" I think you should combine these two lines so it scans better.

Honestly, I have a huge issue with the last stanza. The victim is never at fault. It sounds like you're accusing the victim. But, you know, whatever you feel. It's your poem. I'm not going to impose my views on you.

I enjoyed reviewing this. Keep writing.

This piece is very dark. And by dark I mean it's wonderful. The imagery is vivid, even though abstract. It felt sort of like....power.
The main character's voice seems very accusatory. In my mind, I'm imagining an old culture and a warrior who ran away from his fight. However, I think it could be translated in multiple ways.
One thing to point out, I can't really put my finger on it, at times the beat flowed kind of odd. Not totally sure if there was even supposed to be one, or if it just snagged in , my mind.
Keep up the excellent work!

This is a great piece of poetry. I strongly recommend this to any one looking for a short but dramatic poem. I thought it was really sad and very well written. Poetry can sometimes be hard but this person nailed it. This kind of work can only come from someone who has been writing for a long time.