Young Writers Society

Hey there.

Is what you're talking about your profile picture?

I like it. Lots of pretty images and colors. A nice descriptive piece.

I do have a few suggestions for change.
-Flowing Fuchsia shouldn't be capitalized.
-use more punctuation at the ends of lines. They can't all be phrases that float around, untethered until they bump against the ceiling, form a government of their own, and attack. Use puctuation to govern your words. They need a firm ruler.
-"Doe spots on silky tufts" Do you mean "fawn spots?" Since Does are adult deer, they wouldn't have spots.
-Large blue Seers, ever watching/ Like oracles on the earth" Seers are oracles. It's just a different name. One of these lines is redundant. You can choose which one to omit. And if you're referring to eyes as "seers," know that seer means oracle to most people.
-"Sea green waves in small orbs sunken into the skull" I would put a line break after orbs. It's a really long line otherwise.
-"A most beautiful sight to see indeed" Omit this line. Or change it. You're telling us, after describing the creature, that it's beautiful. I know it's beautiful. I just read the poem. It's a bit redundant.

Anyway. Lovely images. Happy writing.

It's good so far. Just a few things:
-"Gentle breezes, Flowing Fuchsia" the word flowing shouldn't be capitalized

-This is probably just me but make the poem longer

I could imagine all that you wrote. As I said, really good. Just make a few changes. Good luck.