MoIIylouise

Hello! This caught my eye straight away because of the title and short description. This is incredibly sweet and sad, the emotions were so strong throughout. My favourite part was ...

Hello! This is very different to most other poems I've read, not that I've read many... I like the idea of it, it's interesting. One main thing I would say ...

This poem is really sweet and emotional. I enjoyed reading it, I could tell exactly how you (I'm assuming you're writing it about how you feel and not just because ...

Hello! This poem literally just explained how I feel. My favourite part was the last part: 'The walls of the others stand tall, Seemingly immune to jabs and pokes Like ...

This is something very different. I like it for that reason, also because it's one of those silly but serious poems. It reminded me of a story my friend started ...

I really liked the ending of this, where you had 'I really don't. AH HA HA!!!' It was short, snappy and effective, a good end to the poem. I was ...

The beginning of this was really catchy, the way each line started with 'We' and then 'But'. I liked how you had an action/sense then you said something that went ...

Hello! You had me gripped from the beginning, wanting to read on to find out more about your main character and whether she was okay or not. I felt sorry ...

Hello! I found this story so far quite interesting and I wanted to read on. Your flow throughout this story is really clear and gripping. I didn't find any of ...

Hello! I think you did edit out all of the obvious mistakes, I can't spot any. Like your other works, the emotions in this are really strong, you're good at ...

Hello! One thing I would say is you could break up your paragraphs a bit because although it was meaningful and quite deep, when I first saw it, I felt ...

Hello! I may be wrong, but in the first line I think it should be through, not threw. Other than that, I didn't spot any other mistakes, it's very well ...

This is really sweet, I tend to go for stories and a completely different genre to this, but it caught my eyes and here I am, reading it. The only ...

This is really sweet. Your description is amazing, it made me really imagine myself to be watching the two girls and honestly, it made me want to cry, not many ...

This is a brilliant poem. I hope that your mum liked it. It says exactly what people feel, in a brilliant way. It's a cute poem and the rhymes make ...