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Hi there, GagaBowie! Utterly two minds imprisoned by one another. Hmm. I don't like the way this is phrased - maybe it would be better off as "Two minds utterly ...

Hey there, Emalily! Whoa - I just want to say that I really liked this. It has a great idea, and a definite rhythm. Though, I agree - you really ...

Hey there. I'm not much of a lyrics person, so here goes... I thought this was beautiful - sad, but beautiful. It almost sounded like a song Green Day would ...

Hey there, Tamtam! ^__^ Well, here goes... I think this is rather short. Not to judge, but doesn't a song usually have to last for more than a minute? :P ...

Hi there, Kaywiia. I don't review lyrics much, but...here we go. I think you have a nice idea here; though, like Writer said, the first thing that popped in to ...

Hey there, Dragon. I don't normally review lyrics, but I just wanted to mention a few things about yours. Now, I'm not an expert, but I do think this song ...

Hi there, ARBY367! ^__^ This one time, I will give in, There is no need for a comma here. Remove it. to him. The past that binds me, The lust ...

My stone is lonely. Its surface is coarse like the fabric of my clothing. My heart is seedless. It cannot keep up with the time that passes. How many blades ...

Hi there, Al3xx! ^_^ My corrections are in red, whilst the words/phrases I think you should remove are in blue. The summer breeze blew against my face and I took ...

Hi there, Blackbird! ^__^ Kiss my bee-stung lips, Drive the splinters into my skin, Thrust until I can’t breathe. This was a very nice opening stanza. Well done. Lift your ...

Hi there, thatboy! It's nice to meet you! ^__^ I start my journey home, Walking past daffodil bay, I love these two lines. ^^ Walk past a man drowning and ...

Hi there. ^__^ The pain inside is killing me. So cliche. Here it lies for no one to see. If love was a game, why can't I win? It would ...

Hi there, Britt! Yuri has a HUGE point here. Right now this so-called poem looks more like a story than poetry. Poetry can be free-verse, but we still use a ...

If I had to say three letters, To you before I die. Then I would have to pick, First I then L then Y . They stand for how I ...

Hi there, Captian Random! ^_^ What a day I'd put a comma here. Full of grief I'd either put a period or a semicolon here. What’s the point of living? ...