When You're Famous

I really liked the song and the story. However, i think the repetition in the verses and the chorus got a little old. Repetitions is fine for repeating "i'm the girl" over and over in the verse or for saying "will you remember me" in the chorus over and over, but having the repetition in both places got slow and almost boring. But i do like the story.

First off, what an idea (:
Loved the concept of the whole guy becomes superstar type story going on.
I liked the alot of it, but I felt maybe you could of offered a whole lot more;
Not to say what you've written doesn't deserve credit.
Make sure you work a little on the flow in the verses... can get choppy at times.
Nice work ( :

Wow thankyou for the great review!

I love, love, LOVE this!!! I like all the pure, true emotion in it. As I was reading the lyrics to myself, I figured out my own little tune to it, and that's a good thing that I was able to do that with your song here. It's a very relatable subject. One of my friends is the type that will be famous someday, you just know it. He's got all the star quality, and he lights up the stage whenever he's on it performing. The thing is, he thinks really highly of himself, so he's going to be that one celebrity with the humongous ego that nobody really likes him as a person, rather just an actor. I doubt he'll remember me during his Oscar acceptance speech, let alone anyone in our school, or town. The guy's going places, he just needs to remember his roots. Nobody likes the guy who only thinks about himself and how things will benefit him. Anyways, I just told you that story because I feel like your song perfectly describes it. I like everything about it. The only thing I would change, is that you use the word "will" a lot. Change it up, if you can. Reword some lines here and there, use a few synonyms, whatever works. Overall, amazing job here. You're very skilled Keep on writing!

Awww... This is so adorable! I love it. I like it because it sounds like it comes from deep in your heart and it isn't all mushy gushy and dumb. It has some sadness, but it still sounds like it could be a fun song. Keep it up!

~Grace1096

Spiderman Here.

I'm the girl in the photograph
The one who always knew
That someday you'd forget me
But I'm still in love with you

thanks guys

Hey there, Emalily!

Whoa - I just want to say that I really liked this. It has a great idea, and a definite rhythm. Though, I agree - you really should split this up, ex: the chorus, the bridge, etc.

However, these are nice lyrics with definite potential.

-Mizz-

I tried to do that haha but it just came out like this

this is so cute! I loved it. But you should split this up into verses and choruses because I dont know how this goes. but other than that this was great! Keep Writing!
Nike