A Journey With The Greats: a montage of the masters

by thatboy

Published July 17, 2010

In Poems

o.k, alot of people will read this and wonder what it's all about. i think people who really like poetry will understand though.

I start my journey home,
Walking past daffodil bay,
Walk past a man drowning and not waving
And I fled down nights and down days

Past midnight moment’s forest,
Past lonely sea and sky.
I remember, I remember:
Where the river lie.

I’m halfway home to my house.
But Macavity won’t be there.
I’ll wonder lonely as a cloud.
And one day I’ll get there.

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Abigail_W.
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Abigail_W. wrote a review Review · Jul 18, 2010

Mizzle wrote: I am a huge fan of poetry, but I don't really know what you mean when you say only avid poets will understand this. I think if anyone digs deep enough, they can understand anything, hmm?


Ah, Mizzle, thatboy is referencing other works! T.S. Eliot's "Macavity," Stevie Smith's, "Not Waving but Drowning," and perhaps William Wordsworth's "Daffodils"; I'm not sure about the last one. Notice the title of the poem: "A Journey With the Greats: a montage of the masters." The greats and the masters of poetry!

To Thatboy:

A very nice poem, which I understood after only a little bit of research. I might recommend taking quotes from the poems you referenced (citing them, of course!) and putting them in italics at the top of the page; that way, even those who are not as interested in classic poetry can enjoy your work! :pirate3:

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Mizzle
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Mizzle wrote a review Review · Jul 17, 2010

Hi there, thatboy! It's nice to meet you! ^__^


thatboy wrote:I start my journey home,
Walking past daffodil bay, I love these two lines. ^^
Walk past a man drowning and not waving
And I fled down nights and down days I'd say "As I fled down nights..." instead of "And I fled..."

Past midnight moment’s forest, Love this!
Past lonely sea and sky. Brilliant.
I remember, I remember:
Where the river lie. Very nice.

I’m halfway home to my house.
But Macavity won’t be there.
I’ll wonder lonely as a cloud, I think you mean wander, not wonder. If not, I think wander would fit better anyways.
And one day I’ll get there. Nice ending.


Overall:

This poem was pretty good. I am a huge fan of poetry, but I don't really know what you mean when you say only avid poets will understand this. I think if anyone digs deep enough, they can understand anything, hmm? Anyways. I rather like the flow you have going here. Other than that, I'd just watch out because sometimes you put a period where there should be a comma.

Still, nice work.

-Mizz-



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