Published July 16, 2010
Cheating
You say I'm your girl
You wouldn't leave me,
If you could
But baby,
It don't work like that
I said the same things
And swore I'd never leave you
Said I never say goodbye, but
It's getting complicated
I'm getting so frustrated
Cause you're not the only boy
Who's got my heart
You don't have a clue
Even if I don't love you
And I can't help
If I'm cheating
It's not like I want to hurt you
You've never done a thing wrong
But I don't feel the way I used to
He's got a killer smile
And I haven't seen you in a while
So act real tough
And talk like you don't care
It's getting complicated
I'm getting so frustrated
Cause you're not the only boy
Who's got my heart
You don't have a clue
Even if I don't love you
And I can't help
If I'm cheating
I'm broken up
And can't decide
What's good for me
And what's really right
I'm confused
And so messed up
Leave me be and just know
I'm sorry
If I hurt you
I'm sorry
I don't want to, but
It's getting complicated
I'm getting so frustrated
Cause you're not the only boy
Who's got my heart
And I can't help if I'm cheating
((This is a song I based of one of my friends' situation.))
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I hadn't heard Unfaitful before this, so I didn't know it sounded like it. Thanks for the help guys. I will work on fixing this.
Hi there, Kaywiia.
I don't review lyrics much, but...here we go.
I think you have a nice idea here; though, like Writer said, the first thing that popped in to my mind was, "Whoa, this sounds a whole lot like Unfaithful by Rihanna," seeing as I had just listened to that song not twenty minutes before. This to me is a bad thing. When you write a song, you want the lyrics to be a fresh dose to the listeners. People may write about cheating, but they each give their own twist to it. EX: "According to You" by Orianthi (not so much cheating, more choosing), "Unfaithful" by Rihanna, or "Before He Cheats" by Carrie Underwood.
I suggest you try to add a different twist to your song.
Other than that, this is really good. Though - who did she choose? o__O
-Mizz-
Hey Kaywiia,
Well, I've never reviewed lyrics before so this won't be very technical but I rt meally liked it. I could feel myself swaying to the unheard music. It reminded me very strongly of Unfaithful by Rihanna, though, which is good and bad.
Good because the words were strong enough to bring on the thought of a popular song, but bad, well, because it's already been done.
Just my thoughts. Who did your friend end up choosing?
Tanya