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Well this is pretty cool. :D I love the imagery. The first thing I can think of to say is that maybe you could add some more detail. Pretty much ...

Hi! So, first off, this is an interesting story I think writers can relate to, so good job on that. The thing is, though, I think you were going for ...

Here's my promised review. :) This part is really where the story starts to come together and feel like a story. I said in the last chapter that the main ...

Hi there! First of all, since this is a fairly long poem, I'd suggest separating it into stanzas. You can do this by just leaving an extra space between the ...

Hi! Let's get started with this. 1. Your first line is rather awkward and it really throws me off. It sounds more like prose than poetry. Even in prose, it ...

Hi there! First off - this is a pretty cool poem. I think it could be improved by a few things. 1. Make "Letting her die also killed me" be ...

Hi! I really like this poem. I agree with the reviewer below me about not understanding why it's in bold. I guess it's because it's the most important section of ...

Okay, first of all, slow down please. We barely get two sentences into it before mass killing starts. You need to spend some time setting the scene first, showing us ...

Hm, this is interesting. Correct me if I'm wrong: I'm reading this as a commentary on TV stations stealing other peoples ideas and (possibly?) ignoring/messing up their meaning, and that ...

Okay, so this story mostly needs work in the grammar department. 1. You need to start a new paragraph every time someone starts talking. Every single time. It will seem ...

This is a pretty fun story. There are some things to work on, though. One is the pacing. The entire story feels really rushed. We never really get to know ...

This is pretty cool. I know the Hound in Fahrenheit 451 always creeped me out. Personally, though, I think this is more material for a horror poem than a satire. ...

This is really quite good. It's really devoid of emotion, which generally isn't a good thing, but this is the whole point of the poem. I love its portrayal of ...

Hi there! Let's jump straight into the review. Just to start, I agree with pretty much everything Firestarter said, especially the passivity. Your story could work in the format it ...

I like this, especially the title. It's good to read when you're feeling down. However, it is really vague. Often it's okay if poems are vague, but since this kind ...