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LadySpark

the way you move your feet when you're trying to go nowhere is a very telling thing

  • Poetry » Dramatic, Other Re: An Addiction of the Mind (16+ for mature themes and mild language)

    Hello there! Here to review you, today :3 So, my first impression of this poem was how meaningful it obviously is to the writer. I can tell that you really ...

    Feb 1, 2013
  • Other » Fanfiction, Teen Fiction Re:

    Hello dear! Spark here to review! First of all, I'm a fellow One Direction Fan. (And avid Larry shipper, I have to admit,) So I must say that I was ...

    Jan 31, 2013
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Bi-monthly Dinner talk

    Hullo there! Spark, here to review! :) So first off I notice that you don't have any periods. And that's sad, because periods need homes too! Since you're using commas, ...

    Jan 30, 2013
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: I just...

    Hello dear! I'm here to review you today. So first of, I have to say that you seem really restricted in the poetry format you've selected. It's choppy, it doesn't ...

    Jan 28, 2013
  • Lyrics » Lyrical, Lyrical Re: Winter Nights: The Truth of January

    Hello, lucky dear. Here to review! So, this is a nice little song. Though, I'm not sure if it's really as song as much as it is a poem. You ...

    Jan 8, 2013
  • Poetry » Dramatic, Romantic Re: Why?

    Hi Lylas, here as requested :3 f ight for me, fight for you, fight for us. Little redundant, don't you think? Try expanding your words so that you can makes ...

    Jan 7, 2013
  • Poetry » Realistic, General Re: Dreams

    Hello! Here to review! :) Salty wet sand, Melts between my toes, Whilst far across the land, My dreams and hopes impose. Fluttering from tree to tree, They flicker across ...

    Dec 30, 2012
  • Short Story » Romantic, Review Re: Forever and Always

    Hello dear! Here to review! Well, first off, this is adorable. But very... cliche? No, not cliche. I don't even know what it is. But I do know that I ...

    Dec 30, 2012
  • Short Story » Realistic, Teen Fiction Re: The random thoughts of a 6th grader

    Hello dear! Aw, this was cute. But we've got some technicalities that could really be fixed. Ugliar Babe, it's Uglier. in sixth grade you are the best if you have ...

    Dec 30, 2012
  • Poetry » Romantic, Dramatic Re: Brand New Eyes

    Hello! So first off, I notice that you've chosen to keep everything lower case, and I don't know if it was a style choice or you're just to lazy to ...

    Dec 30, 2012
  • Lyrics » General, General Re: Fields of Burning

    Hello there! Here to review! First off, I'm not a big fan of things written without punctuation. It's just not my style. But I really liked this. Just a few ...

    Dec 30, 2012
  • Poetry » Realistic, Romantic Re: Our Love

    I think what you have as the first line is actually supposed to be the title, so if I were you, I'd separate it. and ' o so hard. kiss ...

    Dec 30, 2012
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Four Days to Live

    Hi dear! :) The earth will end. We will cease. No more of anything. And tonight I find my brain in a place that shouldn't matter because I don't believe ...

    Dec 30, 2012
  • Poetry » Romantic, General Re: Love Songs on Tattered Sleeves

    Hello dear! Here to review. So... okay, formatting. I see below that you lost your format, so I'll help you with that! :) When finding our love was as important ...

    Dec 30, 2012
  • Poetry » Literature, General Re: I knew it would be raining

    Hello darling! Here to review ;) I didn’t know it would be crying, What would be crying? This part is kind of confusing, cause you haven't referenced where the rain ...

    Dec 30, 2012


A woman knows the face of the man she loves as a sailor knows the open sea.
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