Kaylyn

Ok, so sorry for the empty comment below. Oops! First off, I have to say, being a fan of the Hunger Games (like midnight premiere, waited in line for the ...

Great poem! First let me say this stanza of the poem was my favorite: As the moonlight embraces everything, The stars blush and put on veils. Silently, the lake keeps ...

I applaude thee adistopper. This is one of the better poems that I have seen. It's not terribly cliche, and full of imagery. The only issues I have with this ...

Some technical things: Roses are red violets are blue [Add , at end of the line] No matter what ill still love you [It's "I'll", this is not a text ...

Ok, here are a few things: Remember when I got my first bike? Of course not, you weren't there... [Take out the ..., maybe add a ! instead] Remember when ...

Why do they wear their helmets? Is it because they got em for free, [If you insist on using "em" at it should be 'em] Or is it cause they ...

Ill always be beside you [Should be I'll, cause I'm sure you didn't mean ill] until the very end, wiping your best friend. [Is wiping a typo?] Ill smile when ...

OK. Here are some technical issues with this: My crush my crush. [Add in comma after crush, both of them] You give me such a rush. [Period is ok here] ...

Really dark, but I'm on edge to see where this goes. Some things I would suggest though, If Emma is one of the main characters in this novel, then to ...

First some technical things: Breaking this up into paragraphs would be great, at least it would make it easier to read. “ENOUGH”. Needs ot be "Enough!" “You are the best ...

Pretty impressive, I'll be reviewing your poetry today. So here's some things starting out: I'm pretty sure they were peach-colored all those mistakes I'm certain they had a tinge of ...

Ok. So this, in fact, is a pretty confusing story. I know it's supposed to be a short story, but this could be lengthened out by quite a bit. It ...

Ok, very...dark. I like the concept (especially love how it's a ginger, as ginger have no soul. ahahaha). Some things I would recommend however: break this up into paragraphs, its ...

Just some techniquical things: “You can now go around and sign yearbooks,” the teacher, Miss Heins spoke at last. Maybe this is just me, but its a little lengthy. Insead ...

First a few technical things: Flo, looked around and saw that the rabbits were anorexic and sickly. No need for the comma as previously mentioned. The air choked her lungs ...