Kaylyn

Alright, I'll be doing a quick review of your poetry: For the most part it flows pretty well until it gets to the last stanza. Everything rhymes until there. If ...

I think that this poem is just a little too short. It has too many lines thrown in there with not enough explanation. Allow the reader to understand. I also ...

I absolutely adore gloom/doom poems. However, some things to work on: Form: I think if you were to break this up into stanzas, it would be a little easier to ...

Alright, just a few things: Grammar: Punctualization in a poem is a tricky thing. You need not put a period at the end of every sentance because that signifies a ...

Welcome to YWS! I can see you are a beginner, which is a step in the right direction. This has some potential, but needs alot of work. Grammar: Seriously lacking. ...

Well, welcome to YWS! If this is you starting out, then you have some potential. However, I do have some suggestions. Here are some suggestions: Grammar/Form: Alright, so it appears ...

Just a few things: Form/Structure: The spacing is like woaah! It's just a little distracting to the reader and seems to make the poem go on and on. It also ...

I applaude thee! This is good. A few things I would suggest to you: Grammar: With some poems, leaving everything lower case works (I don't ever really like it, but ...

O.K. So here are a few things: Form/Structure/Flow: Here is a suggestion of putting your poem into a form. Pierce into me, Deeply: Make me bleed, Softly rip my flesh, ...

I'm Kay, and I'll be reviewing your poem today. O.K. Here are some general things that need fixing. Grammar: "I may not be perfect but im one of a kind" ...

Just a few things: "To contemplate the feral shore, and learn the lyrics of your songs. Instead my time is wearing out... And I don't want to see you cry." ...

Ok. Just some minor things: Grammar: "appologize" should be apologize. Just take out the extra p " Go.. just go " I said, allowing the anger to mix into my ...

O.K. So here are some minor things that I would improve. Grammar: "He had the chance, to get even with me for killing his one of his brethren." Reword this ...

Love it! Can't wait to read more of this, and honestly if I had gotten this far on a book in the store, I would have bought it already, let ...

Hi! So, this is really well written. I couldn't find any grammatical mistakes. The structure is not what I am used to but in this case I believe it works. ...