Holy Matrimony a Dreadful Thing

First want to say that I liked your poem, and now on to errors I noticed...

#1 Their are too many periods, try commas and shake it up a bit.

#2 Try rearranging the stanzas a little, like making the last two verses in the last stanza it's own stanza and putting the first two verses in with the second to the last stanza. ( If that makes any sense...)

Those are the only problems with your poem that I saw, other then that I think it was a very good poem.

Alright, just a few things:

Grammar:
Punctualization in a poem is a tricky thing. You need not put a period at the end of every sentance because that signifies a rest. It's still just like writing a sentance. In your porm alot of them are cut off. It should be:

Standing in front of the mirror.
Her reflection a sight to see.
A real lady with class .
Not a hair out of place.

Lips painted into a smile,
Eyes empty as a starless night.
In a dress of lace and tulle,
Around her neck a noose of pearls .

It’s her big day,
But it feels like a death sentence.
Holds her tongue,
She has a family name to live up to.

It's her duty to her namesake,
She'll gladly walk to her coffin.
And marry a man she'll never love,
Only because she loves her family.

Will sacrifice her happiness,
Just to appease them.
Holy Matrimony a dreadful thing.
Her own worst nightmare.

There see, throw some commas in there. I didn't see any more incorrect words, so great job there.

Flow:
Ok, while most of this flows good, there were a few stanzas that could use some fixing up. Such as:
It’s her big day,
But it feels like a death sentence.
Holds her tongue,
She has a family name to live up to.
This is so different from your other stanzas. I would recommend maybe lengthening It's her big day and Holds her tongue or shortening the other two lines.

Other than these, its good. Good luck and keep writing!
~Kay

Hi there! I'm going to review your fantastic work of art, so yeah.

First things first,
I really liked the concept of this poem. The only problem was is that it needed a bit more punctuation, that way, the reader will be able to read with emotion. I think you should edit some stanzas, maybe just tweak it a little bit. Some of your words were spelled wrong.

Don't worry, you did a great job, it just needs to be edited a bit more. My favorite stanza was this,

"It's her duty to her namesake
She'll gladly walk to her coffin
And marry a man she'll never love
Only because she loves her family"

It was so sweet and beautiful to me. Anyway, keep writing more AMAZING WORKS!
Welcome to YWS
GrapeNerd

Hello I am Chuck!
Okay for starters something I noticed straight away is that your poem lacks punctuation.
In the third stanza wouldn't Supposed make more sense?
Also in the last stanza you spelt dreadful wrong.
I don't really have anything else to say besides that I really like it.
Keep up the good work!