Kaylyn

Just a few things: Grammar: "Pail and bleak" You used the wrong version, it should be pale not pail. "Erie white" Should be spelled Eerie. "Of a forthcomming day" Should ...

First of all, Bravo. I love the rhyming scheme and that's quite impressive with the length. However, just a few things I saw: "Falling back on my grave inscribed on ...

I'd say firstly that I think you could do a lot more with this poem than what is already here. However, just a couple technical things: "on paper --" If ...

First of all, I just wanted to say how I admire this. It's a poem with true content. Anyways, there are some things that could use a little fixing. I ...

Alright, just a few things: Grammar: "Wont let me roll.." Be careful to make sure you add in those apostrophes in contractions. Texting and autocorrect has certainly spoiled me in ...

Okie dokie, it's ok that you are a little rusty. However, I feel that this poem is SO generic that I feel like I have read this a hundred times. ...

Just a few things: Grammar: I found a few mistakes such as these: "Don't hold me back/ no more." Grammatically this should be ANY more. Also, there is an additional ...

Just a few things: Grammar: I know that some don't use "proper" grammar and capitalization in their poetry, but I really prefer it. Personally, that's all I can think about ...

Okie dokie, so there is no format to this poem what-so-ever which can really pull away attention from the actual content, and I'm sure you worked hard on this, so ...

Okie dokie. Just a few things: Grammar/Punctuation: Make sure to add periods and commas where they are needed. When you end a thought, end it with a period. You did ...

Okie dokie, not normally a huge fan of these kinds of poems, however, with that being said, this is a bit better than most. Flow/Rhythm For the most part you ...

Alrighty, just a few suggestions: Break this up into two stanzas, it's long enough to be done. If you were to break it up into stanzas I would recoomend breaking ...

Alright, just a few things, but first lets focus on your structure. It appears to be an explosion of "OMG, WHAT"S HAPPENING HERE??" I don't know if this is intentional ...

Ok. Just some general things: Structure: I would break this up into stanzas. When it is longer like this it is easier for the reader to follow if it is ...

First, let me say I love this. Some things I will address though: Grammar: Change it to perfect "o" instead of perfect 'o'. If you aren't going to capitilize, the ...