Kaylyn

This was a great poem. It had a great flow and ryhming scheme. I feel the same way and love the opening lines. I didn't see any grammar mistakes. Great ...

Okay Lovabale Little Sock, you were overly harsh. I think that you need to stop being so pessimistic. The girl that wrote this asked for help, you don't have to ...

Okay, I'm not sure that I have read the second chapter, but I'll go ahead and give this a shot. “Leah, your mom is dead worried about you” I said. ...

Alright then. Let me start. Please don't take my critique to harshly, I just mean to help out your writing. First off, you need to cut down on the amount ...

WoW! lol. This was great. Although I did spot a mistake. Your grammar was off a bit. Its planned not planed. Other than that it had a great flow to ...

I didn't see anything dark and emo about it, I loved it. I think that raw emotion is the best. It makes me feel what the writer feels. I will ...

Again, I liked the storyline. You could go far with this story and I believe that it has some major potential. All it needs is a bit of polishing up. ...

Well whats been said I think has been covered. I for one loved your work. It was fantastic. I really hope you continue with this because you have me sitting ...

This introduction is great. Its detailed, and it lets you inside the characters head. I loved it. Your grammar and punctuation is great, I couldn't find any mistakes. This story ...

Great story. Its was amazing. Its a great prologue and I really hope - and want you to continue. I agree. It could use some details. I didn't see any ...

Awesome paragraph, please keep writing it. It was a bit of well... how can i explain it? You had me so built up over the characters and that the darkness ...

lol. that was a great poem. when the cheese attacked. so original. you can garuntee that there will never be another poem like it. i need your friend to sputter ...

Okay. You had a few grammar mistakes that I noticed. Its calm not clam You also need to seperate your characters dialogue from your description. Its a rule of literature. ...

Okay. You had some punctuation and grammar mistakes. I suggest you fix them. Especially the uncapitilized I. People will eat you alive for doing that! My favorite part of the ...

Great poem courtney! That was great. It has a nice flow and evokes emotion. Truely beautiful poem. Wish I was that talented. AlthoughI agree,I think you should use something more ...