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Hey ChocolateCello, I've reviewed a bit of your work, but I saw this in the green room and I couldn't pass it by. what you’re thought is on Since you're ...

Hey Mudkkippi (I love Mudkips so much) and welcome to YWS! Here's a review to help you out a bit here. If there's anything you don't understand, just reply to ...

Hey Harley!

Okay, we have an issue already here. I started reading the first paragraph, and you have absolutely no spacing between your punctuation and your next sentence. For example: her,no,I'm You ...

Hey, Perf. Joopeetah here for a lil' review! I noticed in this chapter that you kept switching between present and past tense. You need to pick one, as not to ...

Hey, EternalRain. I don't think I've checked out any of your work before, but I've decided to look at the works of my fellow teammates. Happy Review Day! The first ...

Heyo! The first thing I noticed in this poem was the format. I know it may not seem like it matters, but putting your poem into stanzas goes a long ...

I thought this poem was adorable and it made me awkwardly giggle out loud in front of my mum. But eh, I'm known for awkward things like that, especially since ...

I like the metaphor this brings out, of a person, an angel, that is being insulted, but the character this is based on loves the angel. I love the lines: ...

Heyo, I'm checking out all of my fellow teammates' works! Happy Review Day! I like the feeling of inspiration you put into this poem. It may seem a little bland ...

I like the theme of the pond in this poem. The nice use of personification in this poem with the pond being named Martin is nice. I like the idea ...

I like this poem. I also like cats. I just found that the format was a little odd. This needs some organization and stanzas. If you separate your poem into ...

One thing I noticed in this poem was a little rhyme scheme in the third paragraph. It caresses a window face Before rushing on to start a race Between leaves, ...

This poem is so simple and adorable. I'm glad you kept the same shape of your lines, because shape is always nice. If you keep all your lines about the ...

Happy Review Day! I finally decided to check out some of your poetry. One of the things that I noticed is that you frequently use commas in this piece. This ...