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Hi Star! Welcome to YWS! I see that a lot of people have commented on this poem, but I thought I would drop by and give my thoughts quickly. One ...

Hi Blues! So, this is the first story of I've read of yours, and you are a good writer! This was definitely a pleasant read, and I think you can ...

Hi WritingIsEverything! Welcome to YWS! I agree with Aria and niteowl. I'm not entirely sure that I see this as a poem. While there a lot of great abstract works ...

Hi there, I'll admit that this story didn't do it for me. I did like the message at the end, but right now this just feels like an okay rough ...

Hi Kafka! This was pretty good. I like how you're able to paint a three dimensional characterization for your main character in two hundred and fifty words - after finishing ...

Hi, So, I'm a big Disney freak and rewrites of fairytales are always fun for me to read. Cinderella is one of my favorite Disney movies (if you can't tell ...

Hi, So I agree - this just childish. But how old was your friend that you wrote this for? If she was young, then that would make sense. But if ...

It's funny that I should come across this piece since "I dreamed a dream" has been stuck in my head. As a whole, rewriting songs is no easy task. I'll ...

Hey, For what this is, it's a good start. The premise is intriguing and I'm curious to see where you take these characters. The piece itself, however, feels a little ...

Hi peanut! Welcome back to YWS! It's so nice to see you around again, and I really hope that you decide to stick around. Anyway, to your piece. You lost ...

Hi Sakura! I think you have a really interesting concept here, especially since this kind of thing does happen in real life. However, it's just that right now- an interesting ...

Hi there. To be honest, this didn't interest me. It's well written, and I wanted to like it, but you spend so much time building up what a sense of ...

Hi there! So, I think that you have the start of something here. The premise is sort of interesting, and I think you are a gifted author. I was for ...

Hey - I've see you've already gotten a lot of advice on this story, but I happened to come across this and I thought I would chime in. I'll try ...

Hi there, So, I would say the idea is interesting and it was enough to get me through the piece as a whole. I'm all for Christmas stories with twists, ...