Deanz

Love love love love this . This story of a venerable insecure girl that is hopelessly in love with a guy that is bound to never return her love is ...

This is good :) . I would just like to point out some spelling mistakes that I have picked up . " kinder-garten " could be written as one word ...

What a stunning poem . Really . This is so simplistic yet effective . I give you credit for writing such a well structured poem like a professional poet . ...

This seems like a contradiction in a sense . You have described how you don't do things your not suppose to do , then , you go on to describe ...

I really liked this piece . I enjoyed the way you started off by praising this "knight" by using the words "God-like" and "generous" . Then , through the duration ...

I liked the way you described every function , purpose and way in which a human being presents themselves . I think this is original and is simple yet very ...

I loved the way you wrote this poem in Old English. I thought no one does that anymore . This poem frightened me a bit , and in this case ...

I would like to start by saying that I like the form of this work a lot but I have spotted a few mistakes that I would like to correct. ...

This is good but I think you should check your grammar :) I really do feel that this poem has great potential and meaning toward it . I also feel ...

"Now I have been stolen and mentally raped" grabbed my attention immediately . Very well done on bringing so much emotion into your poetry I really liked the way you ...

"My heart fluttered like a caged sparrow" Is such a stunning statement . I feel as though you could have added more images similar to that one. I really acknowledge ...

This is too short for a first chapter of a book but I enjoyed the emotional confessions this piece conveyed . I would also like to add that you could ...

Love is not limited by the cruel act of taking advantage .. Which you have made clear in this poem . I personally found beauty in your words . Only ...

This poem has a song-like take on it . The imagery of summer and her beauty that you have written simplistically places me in a joyful scene . I enjoyed ...