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Sweetheart, you know as well as I do that this is not your original work. This, copying what other people wrote first, is called plagiarism, and is very wrong. In fact, it's illegal, and you can get in big trouble for it.
This is a website where you post your own original poems and stories. If you can't do that, I think you might be a little young for this forum.
some one had hacked my account and did this
Hello! This is a very great poem for someone so young. I think you will have a beautiful life of poetry in the future when you learn about all of the other things you can use to spice up your works. Because you are young and you don't know all of the tricks up a poet's sleeve, this work is simple. That's not so bad because it makes it cute and sweet. It does look like you have redundancy down (if you don't know what that means, it is the repeating of certain words) and you have a unique rhyme set up in there as well. Personally, I don't do much during the summer (I wish I did) but your poem has given me some ideas to try.
Excuse the repeated comments!
This poem has a song-like take on it . The imagery of summer and her beauty that you have written simplistically places me in a joyful scene .
I enjoyed your lines:" Do you fish in a stream , or lazily dream on the banks as the clouds go by?" as it reminds me of Alice In Wonderland for some strange reason which made me feel happy and child-like .
The use of question marks in your poem successfully makes your readers think and form a picture in their minds, making their imagination more active .
Good work , Short and sweet !
This poem has a song-like take on it . The imagery of summer and her beauty that you have written simplistically places me in a joyful scene .
I enjoyed your lines:" Do you fish in a stream , or lazily dream on the banks as the clouds go by?" as it reminds me of Alice In Wonderland for some strange reason which made me feel happy and child-like .
The use of question marks in your poem successfully makers your readers think and form a picture in their minds making their imagination more active .
Good work , Short and sweet !
I think this is very good and well-written and fun and simple and beautiful and I just love this! :3
I love this poem! It's so cute! :3 I love how simple yet happy it is. Nice job with the rhyming, too. Again: I love it!!!
-- Wonder
Hullo!
So this poem is simple but absolutely lovable! It's upbeat, fun, and easy for readers to relate to. The rhyming, little descriptions, and imagery really added to the summery joy, and all there is to correct is "So Do I!" — it would be "So do I!" Unless you purposely capitalized "do" of course. Other than that, everything was great! I'd love to read more short-yet-filling poems like this. ^-^
I read poems on YWS in the summertime and I loooooove your poem!!!!!!!!!!
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Neonmask
Oh and did you draw your profile pic? It's really good!