Hi Rage, June here,
I like this poem a lot because I can relate. I don't like the constant referral to of the dictator as an "it" because it's awfully ambiguous and it makes me want to find more about what and who it is. I'm also not sure if every line in this poem should come to a full stop on the end, because I think the flow of it could be improved if some of the lines tied into one another instead. Your rhyme scheme came about nicely, I think, but the more I read it, the more I want to argue that it feels a little forced.
Keep writing,
June
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