ConverseFireGirl

Wow, this is a really powerful piece of writing! I thought that this must have been a very hard topic to write about, but you did it well. The reader ...

Pompadour... HOW AM I NOT FOLLOWING YOU. YOUR WRITING IS MARVELOUS! :O Seriously though, this was amazing. When you say this was a spur of the moment, I congratulate you. ...

Hey there! Now, I really like this poem, but I am being SUPER picky when I say that shouldn't the first word "I" be in italics like the rest of ...

Wow, this was so beautiful! :O My favourite line was: "I guess that tears don't hurt anything~ they're why these cheeks are so soft." That was so good, I was ...

Wow, this is a really, really nice poem. I especially like how you put the separate words on the different lines, which really added more of a punch to it. ...

Hey there, again! :D I'm here for a review for you! So, right, let's get some of the improvements out of the way first. "His eyes laces were long" I ...

This is a good poem! I like it. Right, so firstly, by the first line, I think that you mean: "She tells ME I taste like spring" not "my" :) ...

This is really beautiful! Okay, I admit I'm meant to be revising a German paragraph but when I read this, I was blown away. Seriously. While I was reading, I ...

Wow this is cool! :D I don't see many of these on YWS at all, in fact I think this is the first one I've seen, and I've been here ...

Firstly, I adore your Avatar. Oh my. Right, onto the poem! :D I'd suggest changing the sounds into italics perhaps, just to give the piece more of a punch and ...

Hey there, beeyaay! :D We haven't spoken in such a long time, and I really wanted to review this, so here we go! :) xD Firstly, I enjoyed your font-changing ...

Hey there! Right, so, you say that this is poetry, but I have to say, it was would appeal more to the reader if it wasn't in a paragraph. Instead, ...

Hey there, yet again, Spotlight-maker! :D I am here for a reviewwww Right, so overall, great work, you've done another fabulous job here and your descriptions and emotions are so ...

Nice work! Your descriptions are very nice and I enjoy how you started writing this. Using sound is very effective to start with in a short story like this one, ...

Hey there again! :D This was a really deep poem indeed, the last part and I was like "WHAT THIS CANNOT HAPPEN" but you wrote it beautifully and I really ...