Chaser

Better late than never, right? Eheheh...sorry. Alright, let's get started! First off! New characters! While I get the feeling that Alli won't be too much of a major influence in ...

Oh, am I glad I stuck around. I'm actually astounded by how perfectly you portrayed Jigoku Shoujo. Sure, I have no idea what the source material is like, but even ...

And so the plot thickens. Beginning with characters, Michelle is a relatable protagonist, with her hatred completely justified to the point of the reader slightly wanting her to have revenge. ...

Review time. Tree branches lashed through the sky leaves flying throughout the air. The dark silhouette of birds darted through the sky, screaming in fright. The first two sentences were ...

Hey, welcome to YWS! I'm going to focus more on techniques, style and flow in this review. Now then: The most apparent aspect of your style is the character's complete ...

You asked for it, here it is. "Duck!" Avalon yelled. Ingred hunkered to the floor, and so did he. "Iris duck!" Ingred shouted. Well, all I have to offer here ...

Hey, what's up? Let's start with the plot. It's interesting, sure, but it doesn't go very far. I'll chalk that up to the chapter being so short. There was only ...

Hi, I'm Chaser. And you're awesome. Now then: As for the beginning, while I see that Avalon's a real lady killer, I can't help but feel that his description is ...

I've never liked prologues, especially informative ones. But for some reason, I find myself enjoying this. It feels like a bit like a clever satire, as though the legend were ...

Excellent, you're writing novels too! Now, let's see here: My eyes came into focus. I sat up, feeling weak, and looked around the room. The walls were a dark maroon. ...

Review for you! Well, you certainly have the mood in place. My suggestion is to elaborate a bit on the setting. The night, although cliche, is pretty much the shortcut ...

Happy Review Day! And so we start with a nice bit of feels. Compelling, relatable, and powerful. A classic technique indeed. It does a good job of leaving the reader ...

Happy Review Day! Well...I have one thing to say here, mainly. While your story seems to have become an epic of sorts, there is one crippling problem that clips its ...

Lock and load, Review Day is upon us. So, alright! I like this! You've got a real mysterious quality to the whole thing. Feel free to build on that with ...

Happy Review Day! Okay, let's start with your first sentence. A knock on the great ice door of her castle, startled Elsa out of her singing. Now, I understand that, ...