Blackwood

The spark reminds me of transformers. Moving on this is a kind of under the desk sneaky type review hope that the eafywrb don't see and I'm not looking at ...

Burying deep within. Burying what deep within? The rhythm unlocks I love this line, however you need punctuation at the end with a comma and also the next line where ...

I feel like your linebreaks need improving in this poem. The whole thing is great and I really enjoyed it but your linebreaks were abrupt and turned it jaggard. For ...

I feel like this stanza, the second one What will happen, Is happening, is done. It was a day of laughter, But now the joy is all gone. Sort of ...

I feel like you should have retained consistent with your "there aint nothing to be done" lines in some of the paragraphs. Also you repeat the word apathy quite soon. ...

Nice lyrics, they were sweet. However especially from a musical perspective your chorus is highly;y undeveloped. In a song the chorus is what makes or breaks it. It is the ...

I see this is a poem with a narrative quality which I like. As I read it it flowed nicely but when I got to this paragraph There was no ...

I really like this poem. The girl is question has great personality that you were able to develop from the first stanza. To the young girls around she wore what ...

I absolutely love the first stanza. It creates a nice image and rhymes well. You stop rhyming in the second stanza but the whole pace changed so it still works. ...

At the beginning I feel like you could have turned all those tray lines into a stanza within itself. Through the world’s pain is the same. Some lose and some ...

It is uncomfortably cramped and has the most terrible of draughts but it's home. I like the initial description of this sentence but you randomly threw on 'but its home' ...

I rack my brains for any information about the Elementals dude what are elementals, another one of these cliche thingies? that I may have buried away somewhere, deep in memory. ...

Good morning. You have absolutely no life. I just spent the last six hours sleeping. You spent it reviewing non stop. Unless you take a break I will never be ...

You apologise for the weird formatting why not fix it? Was it because the publishing centre also frustrated you? Don't worry. It's plenty readable. Thank you for the dashes at ...

This poem has both some lovely imagry and metaphors. One thing that confused me was the use of his and her. I can't tell the gender of beck nor can ...