BaileyTheHoosier

First off, welcome to YWS. I'm going to be a little critical, but don't take it to heart. Just take it as advice to improve on. I don't like your ...

I love the poem honestly. Don't take my review hastily and negatively, because I completely understand the concept of what you are attempting to do throughout the poem. Really, my ...

The poem isn't a bad idea at all, and truthfully I get what you are trying to accomplish. It's an address to everyone struggling with feeling and negative emotions. There ...

To be completely honest, I'm confused on what your purpose is. It's probably a great piece for what you are trying to accomplish, but I don't completely get it. I ...

I love this piece. It's not necessarily something that you can critique, however, because it seems like a journal entry. But, I'm going to do my best. I enjoy how ...

Truthfully, the piece isn't really my type of story. But it was an enjoyable read, and probably even more so if you are someone who actually likes reading stuff like ...

This piece was truthfully astonishing. The word choice, varying length of sentences, the flow. It's accomplished work and I can't really give much critique to it. I loved the way ...

I love the poem. The way you use the black girl as symbolization for the progress of America since the 60s is absolutely amazing. I like how you made the ...

Hey! The poem is actually well written, there is just a few minor errors that need tweaking. 1. In my opinion, I feel like the italicization and bold is unnecessary. ...

It's a fantastic poem! My only critique would be the varying line counts in stanzas. Truthfully, it's just a very literal negative. It's not something that you necessarily need to ...

I love it. I'm not really a short story author, however so I can't be so critical. I love how you avoid bland adjectives and always seem to look for ...

It is a great piece to begin with. I would go through and attempt to change some of the bland, typical adjectives that you use. Use alternatives to beautiful, happy, ...

It is a great, depressing, and tragic short story. The only critical advice I can give you is to avoid common adjectives. For example, instead of saying beautiful say gorgeous ...

I connect to this as well. I would have connected a lot better a couple years ago, but recently my social status has escalated and I've become a lot more ...

The poem is incredibly sad. It reminds me of a memoir of past abusive experiences and how they seem to affect you current romance. It's great and really relatable. It ...