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Re: My Blue little broken mug
How can a broken mug hurt me this much? Honestly, even without any of the other emotional stuff, I still get hurt when any of my mugs break. I had ...
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Re: Mary just wants to be left alone
Hi Creeper! In this story, we follow Mary, a horror-loving teenager who summons a demon boy called Tancredi to punish her brother Mike, who has been tormenting her. While Tancredi ...
Aug 14 -
Re: "that'll be £27.90, see you in six months."
On the surface level, this reads like a reflection on the state of healthcare in the UK because literally I don't remember the last time I went to the dentist, ...
Aug 13 -
Re: heartbeat
This is such a cool way to display a poem. I absolutely love it. The different fonts really give it that nostalgia, with most of it being written in a ...
Aug 12 -
Re: Chapter 1- The People We Become
Hello! I am excited to review this first chapter of yours! This is a very sweet opening chapter to what I assume is a young adult or teen coming of ...
Aug 12 -
Re: I don’t know and I don’t have to know.
Hi Swazi! Welcome to yws and congratulations on sharing your first piece of writing! This is a really sad piece, but one I am sure many can relate too, including ...
Aug 12 -
Re: What if?
This is such a devastating poem. It reads more like a long stream of consciousness: the worries that worm around in your brain when you can't sleep at night, when ...
Aug 11 -
Re: Games are better with someone else
Hi creeper! Another nice little story. Aside from the mention of Cadell's parents, there's nothing creepy here really, just two sweet little kids! Cadell watched closely from the bushes. The ...
Aug 11 -
Re: My Father
This is a really poignant and sad poem. I like how the length of the stanzas changes throughout the poem, giving it a level of uncertainty that fits well with ...
Aug 10 -
Re: After the Light
Hi there! I loved your short story. The concept is really good, and the whole thing builds up a lot of suspense and intrigue throughout the narrative. I love stories ...
Aug 10 -
Re: All he did for love
Hi! Back again for another review. This one was simple, creepy and even a little touching with the relationship between Keir and Mara! Keir licked off the blood in his ...
Aug 9 -
Re: the oracle of delphi plays cookie clicker and eavesdrops on the bus
Okay, so firstly I had to Google who the Oracle of Delphi was, so now I know a little about Pythia, and I hope that's who you mean, or that's ...
Aug 9 -
Re: My wet bolster and lap complain of my cries verse
Hi! I wanted to review your poem as a thank you for your review of mine. I really enjoyed this. The strict AABB rhyme scheme and two-line stanza structure made ...
Aug 9 -
Re: The League of Life [Ch. IV, Nine]
Firstly, I love the drawings of all the characters! That's really gonna help me picture them all as I read more chapters. It's especially unique how you incorporated them as ...
Aug 8 -
Re: O retorno de Ulisses/ A súplica de Eurímaco
Hello! I enjoyed this poem, which details a poetic retelling of a key scene from The Odyssey. You capture the essence of the story well, with Eurymachus on his deathbed ...
Aug 8
