Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review.
To me, this poem feels somehow inspiring. Especially that last part. It seems concluding, which is ironic, since you're writing about a question mark .
The fact that the number 13 is considered very unlucky by some, and quite lucky by some others, really relates to the theme of the poem. That confused feel...
Maybe it's just coincidental, but it's GOOD.
I like the new take on the 'ignorance is bliss' quote. (That's one of my favourite quotes, from one of my favourite movies )
Your word choice is perfection, delineated in lines like:
There it is again, that mark
That maddening figure of human limits
and
A cane, to reel me back in
To remind me that there are things
That I don’t know
In the 8th and 12th (hehe multiples of 4) parts, you say contentedness and completeness. I think contentment and completion would be better choices in those places, but that's up to you.
Overall, this was a great piece of work!
Keep Writing!!
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