I.
I’m not quite sure
Why it looks like that
II.
A cane, to reel me back in
To remind me that there are things
That I don’t know
III.
That I will never know
An endless abyss of questions
That none know the answer to
Will I ever be complete without the knowledge
I cannot have?
IV.
There it is again, that mark
That maddening figure of human limits
V.
That mockery of the smallness of my mind
VI.
But sometimes I must be content
VII.
And look at a flower without
Knowing its species or how it works
How the petals find themselves to be so beautiful
And sometimes knowing less is understanding more
VIII.
Contentedness can be found
In the ticks of time
The minutes that I find myself
Unwilling to name
IX.
Ignorance is bliss
X.
But ignorance is also hatred
XI.
The willing lack of knowledge can
Be harmful, can hurt
And sometimes ignorance is not bliss at all
But murder
XII.
Can completeness be found
Without a knowledge of everything?
XIII.
Some things are to be known
And some are not
But maybe I will try
To push my limits
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Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review.
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To me, this poem feels somehow inspiring. Especially that last part. It seems concluding, which is ironic, since you're writing about a question mark
The fact that the number 13 is considered very unlucky by some, and quite lucky by some others, really relates to the theme of the poem. That confused feel...
Maybe it's just coincidental, but it's GOOD.
I like the new take on the 'ignorance is bliss' quote. (That's one of my favourite quotes, from one of my favourite movies
Your word choice is perfection, delineated in lines like:
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In the 8th and 12th (hehe multiples of 4) parts, you say contentedness and completeness. I think contentment and completion would be better choices in those places, but that's up to you.
Overall, this was a great piece of work!
Keep Writing!!
Thanks for the review mate!
Hi! It's me Via and I'm here for a review! So... let's get started.
POSITIVES:
How could I not like a poem that says in the description, inspired by aooborormeo's Thirteen Ways of Looking at a Blank. My god, poets should always take inspiration from each other. Wow! I'm very flattered.
Seriously though, this is very good. I can tell that this poem might be somewhat rushed, but well thought out! I love the idea of using a question mark, to me that just speaks volumes of what ideas you want to explore as a poet and an artist.
I LOVE THIS STANZA, and I'm just saying that for the heck of it.
This right here, is excellent! I love the exploration and play off the imagery of a question mark and bringing a more philosophical approach to it. Nice job on that!
and then, I don't often enjoy questions in poetry too much, but I like this here
Exploring the idea of knowledge and ignorance is something that many writers can relate to.
The broken concept of dividing IX and X, is a bit abrupt but it works well!
CRITIQUES:
My poem was very old and like yours, has some rhythmic issues. Just a little editing and experimenting on how to present your ideas will make this poem even better. Read your poem out loud, it helps spot those muddled sections.
I noticed you obviously kept question marks, but utilize periods to add more structure and emphasis to your poem. It would help with the flow of each section.
Auto capitalization is the bane of all poets. Lines that are a part of the same sentence don't all need to be capitalized. Just look at it.
This stanza:
I can see what you're trying to do here with the flower imagery. However, when it comes to writing imagery with a poem of this particular structure, while less is more, rhythm I think here and some rewriting will do this section some good.
Finally, this just might be me being picky, try to bold the roman numerals, makes it easier to read.
My biggest piece of advice that I got for my poem, was to edit and edit and edit! Try to keep exploring the question mark theme and write little stanzas. Then take them out, put them in, move it around. Experiment!
Overall, wonderful poem! I'm impressed! Keep on writing!
Thanks so much!! And yeah, I literally did not edit this I was just like yeah. Good enough. But I definitely will!
Hi, Pineapple here for a little review!
Wow, I thought this was a really smart idea. The poem was so dramatic and could make the reader think. Who knew that a question mark could have so much behind it? I really liked the format of it as well. Instead of using regular numbers, you used Roman numerals.
I especially like the lines "Ignorance is bliss/But ignorance is also hatred." I really like the phrase "ignorance is bliss". And, yes, ignorance can also be hatred because deep down we're neglecting something.
Overall, amazing job. I enjoyed reading this. I hope you keep writing!
Signed,
Pineapple
thanks so much !!! ^_^