It's all too much bitter
and not enough sweet
A weary endeavour
for wearier feet
There are too many tears
for this pre-salted sea
And sometimes just being
is too much to be
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I think this poem portrays well what being overwhelmed feels like.I know that people have felt this,including me.I liked reading this,good job.But we can overcome these feelings by asking for help.Don’t worry,everyone worries.What I mean is everyone can feel overwhelmed.I hope that you will have a wonderful and amazing day and night! Bye for now.
Thanks so much for the review and your kind words
Hey, there! I stopped by to see the content of this poem that was titled just with an emoji. So here are a few thoughts on it. First of all, it is short and easy to read, which makes it great for quick consumption if one is not in the mood to read long poetry. Secondly, I like the organized capitalization of the first letter on every two lines. It makes for consistency throughout the poem. The rhyme and flow are good as well. And finally, some thoughts on interpretation: you've done well expressing succinctly the feelings of sadness and weariness we all face at times. The poem conveys the emotion that appears to be associated with bearing an intense sadness for a long time, particularly by the phrase "for wearier feet." Good work.
P.S. I would definitely suggest trying to come up with an actual title for this poem. It is definitely good enough to deserve one. Even if it's just one word like "Heaviness" or a phrase like "The Burden of Existence," that would work. It doesn't have to be a direct phrase or quote taken from the poem; you can get creative and pull something from the intended interpretation or whatever you like. Anyway, it deserves a proper title.
thank you so much for the review!! and yes, I'm definitely planning on giving it a title at some point, I just genuinely had 0 ideas lmao. thank you!!
I love that, and I understand that life can be bitter-sweet. This poem has a lot of heart, and emotion in it, I can tell what you were feeling. In the end, don't you worry, when eating a sour candy it's normally sour before it's sweet. You may be at the most bitter part, but eventually things will get all the more sweeter. You are great at poetry, by the way. I love how you started this poem, and how you ended it off. Though, it could use some punctuation, that'll make it ten times better than it already is.
Keep writing, and keep doing amazing things with your life!! <3
mate,,,, you are so sweet,,,,, I actually really needed this today. mate.
Well thank you! I'm glad I could make your day just a bit better! Sending hugs!!
<3
P.S Okay, but seriously though, if you ever need to talk, or anything I gotchu. Even if we just met lol.
aah thank you so much!! the same absolutely goes out to you!!
Hehe!:D
Also, I love your profile picture, that movie was GREAT!!!
it's my favourite movie!! have you read the book?? it's also really great