Hi WaywardxWanderer.
I am completely entranced by this piece, the title of which having initially intrigued me because I too admire the stars. I am not used to reviewing poems but I will give this my best shot.
"i have been asleep for so very long."
The idea of the narrator being "asleep for so very long" seems to refer to a passive existence. Merely surviving, not thriving. I interpret this line as the narrator standing still and watching the world around them unfold. This line is very powerful because I think many of us have felt this way at one point or another, myself included.
"and stars leech their melancholy tune into my bones."
This line is my favorite and really intrigues me because I have always considered the moon as the most melancholic of celestial bodies, not the stars. This give me a new perspective on the stars for how they are seen clustered together from our view but in actuality they burn far from each other and may feel lonely as a result. In this line, the narrator seems to compare themselves to the stars in that they too live in the darkness of night even during the day. The narrator can both relate to the stars in this way and maybe find comfort in that similarity too. Sometimes knowing we aren't the only ones struggling internally can be a comfort. We all carry scars from our past experiences and may feel broken as a result but knowing we aren't alone in that feeling is huge. I find immense encouragement in this poem.
I really enjoyed this poem, you words are beautiful, provocative and ethereal, just like the stars. Your poem has an obscure tone in how few words there are, yet speaks volume to the human condition.
Thank you for sharing!
- Poetry Misfit
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