Young Writers Society

Hi, hello there @vampricone6783! This is Ina speaking. I am here to give a quick comment/review.

I feel like Lucas has a stronger personality yet pretty stupid, and Isabella is too sensitive. Both husband and wife do not understand each other and communicate to each other properly for them to have this type of problem. This is very interesting but I don't know if this is actual song or just lyrics. Do you have like a link where I can listen to the song? The song reminds me of like those old poems I read in my English and Language textbooks.

thank you for sharing your song. I would like to read more about the plot. Have a good morning, day, afternoon, or night.

Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),

Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!

Anyway let's get right to it,

I spotted this having spent a bit of time in the green room and I thought I'd take a look. This one seems to be from story that I can remember a bit of too, so we'll see. I am not the best when it comes to reviewing lyrics but I'll take a look at what I think it means and the emotions that it manages to bring across to us here.

So starting right off with the meaning. It seems we're sort of trying to express the idea of these two being in some pretty serious trouble in terms of their life but it also appears that at every turn they almost end up lying to themselves in how much time they spend trying to declare that everything is perfectly fine and under control. I think you manage to pretty much nail the emotions for these though. The beat this song seems to have syncs up quite nicely with these longer stretches of their problems being talked about punctuated by the shorter repeating sections of them trying to convince everyone that everything is perfectly alright.

Overall, I think you've got a pretty nice piece here, one that brings across a surprising amount of meaning even if you don't actually know all of the characters here.

Aaaaand that's it for this one.

As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.

Stay Safe
Harry

sounds like the characters are going through a rough time. I'm intrigued 👀