Ok I'm back for more spooky fairytale like stories! I like the way you've started this one, because I think it goes well with the theme of the story.
One Day,their father started a whole town,the one they ended up living in and he even named it after their last name.”The town of Richardson.”
So their father started a town in one day? I'll admit I don't think I've read your other short story on these characters, but a whole town in one day feels unlikely unless that's a specific feature of The Town of Richardson. I would remove the 'one day'.
Parents would tell their children to bully Leona and Amelia by calling them names like:”Spoiled brats!” and “ugly pigs!” The children would think nothing of it and name call them.They were told that it was supposed to be a fun game.
Hmmm, isn't it more likely that the parents would call them names and the children would pick it up? I find it hard to believe parents would actively tell their children to be bullies. It's often more of a do as I say not as I do situation. But of course kids are sponges so would definitely repeat what they heard.
Their parents took Leona and Amelia there,to get rid of their troubles.
How would a circus get rid of their troubles? Distract them, maybe, but how would it get rid of them?
The girls saw many different animals.They even saw people bend themselves like elastic bands and leap over tall buildings,buildings that were so tall,they seemed to touch the Heavens.
I'd love more description about the circus - it seems a really interesting place!!
“So I can turn them into skeleton-vampire hybrids.You’ll be able to visit them,of course.But they’ll live in my circus,as freaks.” The man said.
I'm surprised he came out and said it... would anyone give their children to him based on this?
I think you could add some more tension with the fire - it's over quite quickly and we miss out on the emotion of the moment! Definitely something you could work on if you want to edit this one.
I like how you've tied two stories together here! It's a neat idea