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Annabelle-Lee Richardson’s origin story

by vampricone6783


*Annabelle-Lee Richardson is a character I created from my story:”The town of Richardson.” This will be the last origin story from this story.My next posts will be origin stories from different stories.Alright,without further ado,let’s get started!

In some year today, there was a young woman named Annabelle-Lee.Annabelle-Lee Richardson, if one wanted her last name.

Annabelle-Lee was the last living Richardson,you see and the Mayor of a town called:”Richardson.” She inherited the whole town started from a family member of hers that lived some time ago, during the 90s decade.

There were ghost stories surrounding her town, some even concerned Leona and Amelia Richardson, relatives of hers from long ago who died in a house fire.

Annabelle-Lee tried to steer the town away from the stories, but that was what people came for.

So,she dressed in black and put on a show.They weren’t wrong, after all.She had seen ghosts in their town before.She even communicated with them.

She tried to help them,too,but a human being can only do so much.

No one needed to know about her interaction with ghosts.

All they needed to know was that she was the mysterious Annabelle-Lee dressed in black,who always had a ghost story to tell.

A/N:andd that’s a wrap! Now,if you read my other origin stories,who is your favorite character and who is your least favorite character? Comment below!


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So, I have jumped right into this, headfirst. I am about to take your origin story and give you my review on it. Remember, I can be pretty dumb sometimes, and we all make mistakes, and there is no reason for you to freak out over what I write, as it is shortsighted and not-so-well-thought-out at many occasions.

That apart, let us just get to Anabelle-Lee Richardson. Now, the name is pretty infamous, right of the bat, due to a certain movie you may have popped in. (Hey, I totally forgot, Happy Halloween!)

While I have to say that there's so much work to be done on your formatting, which is, not good, especially with spacing and punctuation, but I am guilty of doing that as well. I have not read the story, but her back-story looks pretty sad.

Overall, I like it and I just wanna jump right into it.




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Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),

Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!

Anyway let's get right to it,

In some year today,there was a young woman named Annabelle-Lee.Annabelle-Lee Richardson,if you want her last name.

Annabelle-Lee was the last living Richardson,you see and the Mayor of a town called:”Richardson.” She inherited the whole town started from a family member of hers that lived some time ago,during the 90s decade.


Okayy..this has to be the shortest of these that I've run into so far. And it looks this is another one that's survived for a pretty long time in this town which is quite an achievement :D. Okay...well this is an interesting start. We haven't heard too much about this town's backstory so this is perhaps our first sneak peak at that through how the name of the town came to be, so already some interesting details being brought up here to get things started.

There were ghost stories surrounding her town,some even concerned Leona and Amelia Richardson,relatives of hers that died tragically in a fire.

Annabelle-Lee tried to steer the town away from the stories,but that was what people came for.

So,she dressed in black and put on a show.They weren’t wrong,after all.She had seen ghosts in their town before.She even communicated with them.


Okayy....so this seems to be set after the whole debacle happened judging by how she sort of knows how things happened but for the most part she's only heard the stories of those ghosts but never been around to experience said stories herself. It's an interesting little detail there, and to see her then try and use the town's prevalence of ghosts is a pretty smart move there as a mayor.

She tried to help them,too,but a human being can only do so much.

No one needed to know about her interaction with ghosts.

All they needed to know was that she was the mysterious Annabelle-Lee dressed in black,who always had a ghost story to tell.


Oooh, I think that's a really interesting detail there towards the end, the fact that Annabelle actually tried to help the ghosts out somehow although it appears there wasn't a lot she could do and considering quite how tragic the stories of some of those ghosts are, that's not all that surprising.

Well...a short and sweet backstory this one...a little thin on details, but I think once again, its brings an exciting new perspective to things. :D

Aaaaand that's it for this one.

As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.

Stay Safe
Harry





Fairy Tales are more than true; not because they tell us that dragons exist, but because they tell us that dragons can be beaten.
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