Young Writers Society

Hey jada!! ok well i really liked it!! it was very
descriptive and painted a beautiful picture in
my mind. This was my favorite
part:

A page turned

Just waiting for life’s pen

To write the next chapter

my only suggestion would be to add some punctuation,
just to help it flow better and give it more, hmmm,
i'm not really sure what to call it, more definition i guess?
I'm not exactly sure, but it was really good! love ya girly!

~Justy

I can totally imagine this to a beat with a lot of strings. if you added some more, like something to be used as verses, this could be an amazing piece of lyrics. The orange-painted sunset, it makes me think of those crisp autumn evenings where everything is tainted by that reddish glow, with leaves scattered around and the only warmth being offered by the waning sun. SO.

Effective--very much so. It makes the reader feel determined to move on, more like a kick-ass and take-names kind of feel.

It's a good piece of work, a display of strong emotions. The only thing I can point out is you should try adding punctuation. It makes the poem flow better.

That's all I can say.

Keep writing!

Nicely done I like it and these are my favourite lines

Winds sweep

Waters flow

Oranges paint the sunset

Love paints the heart