very good. i especially like how you have described the girl, and well... pretty much everything o.O it is specific enough that i can visualize it in my head, yet vague enough that i can add my own thought... like picture someone i know into it. always a nice touch.
but like everything there is work to be done! my OCD is working up for i see a 7-9-7-9-4-4 pattern in the stanzas. there really is none. killing me here :p. and u say that no one knows her anymore. but you also said there was a day the world panicked and so forth. so wouldn't the world know her? later? OCD again, from the single word lines amid all the multiple :\. overall good, but i would add a little more detail. may be to how she looks? and age wise? and the day she was abducted?
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