What I desire most,
to swallow is,
the delicious mouthwatering smell
Buried within books,
which rustles out
as pages are flipped.
Treasured words pressed on precious paper.
Wafting out from the confined ages of past,
Tantalizing my taste buds.
A shiver down my spine,
the glory,
the wonder
the esteemed parchment holds.
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Yes i diffinatly liked this poem. It seemed to put me in a mode of understanding which is hard to do. I felt like i was apart of the poem even though i was the reader. It flowed well even though it was on the more random side but i like that because i cant stand when everyone wants you to fallow strict rules and such. So deffinatly good work. (= (=
Overall, I really like this, but I have a few nitpicks.
I'd take out "delicious" to improve the flow and make it "mouth-watering". Also, I don't think you need the misplaced commas in the first five lines.
Other than that, great job and keep writing!
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Wow, I like this. Whoa I've been reviewing poetry so much that I felt like I was going to have to explode but this was really good. I liked that you didn't drown yourself in rhymes and the formatting fit for this poem and it was really catchy and it flowed well.
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Good job and keep writing,
~Angel