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There are several parts of this poem that I enjoyed.
1) I really love the first few lines. Basically, what I got from it, is the first steps of that puppy love where when he (or she) smiles, you do, too. When they laugh, you join in. Everything about that person is so special and great and powerful that you feel just happy and excited.
2) I loved how you wrote, "When you say I love you, my heart jumps inside. I try my best to say how much I love you, but i'm busy trying to breath because admitting to my feelings isn't easy for me." I love love love that. See, it's the same for me. I can love somebody with everything I have but telling them that is hard.
Your poem really touched me. Nice job
I love this poem, normally I am not one for love poems (that's a lie, I like them just fine, lol) I love how you describe how that one person makes you feel, the only true problem with this is your spelling errors. Breath should be breathe unless you are trying to catch your breath, and to should be too because it means "also" or "as well". Lastly, I would put quotes around "I love you" because they are their words to you, not your words. I think you did an excellent job on this, and I recommend you keep writing, you have talent.