This poem is an honest and fittingly unpolished, but with myriad blemishes, distracting from the beauty so crudely crafted. To begin describing those scratches:
This poem is very long, and not very illuminating. It is fine to be deliberately obfuscating, but much shorter poems than this have done a better job highlining a complex issue in more striking ways This poem is about a loving friendship turned relationship that turned sour, a beautiful apple you bit into, which, through some mysterious magic, turned rotten as you ate with relish, forcing you to throw it away. I am forced to conclude it must have been "magic" because you simply mentioned he was "toxic" but without explaining exactly why...unless I missed the part where an evil wizard cast a spell on him.
I need to understand what, exactly, happened to the relationship to empathize with you in the relationship- ideally, you shouldn't merely READ a poem as I did here, you should FEEL it-but I DO feel like I learned something about your life in the reading of this poem, and I do wish I could read more and learn more. You are an intriguing subject lol
Points: 148
Reviews: 45
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