Warning: This work has been rated 18+ for mature content.
I glanced at the clock and made a mental note that my parents should be at work right now. Then I looked at Cole, his sapphire eyes bore into my soul, raw with emotion. I have to make a decision.
" A week ago I would never be talking to a guy like you, let alone becoming so close." I started
"But you deserve to know things about me if we are going to have a chance."
"Sky," he rasps
"No, let me do this." I interrupt.
We move to sit on the edge of the bed and he grasps my hands as I face him.
" You know a different Sky. You know the confident, tell it like it is girl who've I tried to be since I met you. But that's not completely me. I'm the youngest in my family," I say and watch as Cole's eyebrows furrow, but I continue on.
"M-my sister's name was Annabeth. She was the golden girl. She was just about to graduate college and her friends decided to take a weekend trip up to a cabin in Wisconsin. They were driving home that Sunday " I tightened my grip on Cole's hands and sucked in a breath "W-when some drunk driver clipped the passenger side of the car, the side my sister was on. She and the girl behind her on the same side were killed instantly. The other two were in critical condition for a while but made it."
I looked up at him with clouded eyes only to see raw emotion. He wordlessly folded me into his arms and let me sob. A few minutes later he spoke.
" That's why you were swimming even though there was a red flag. Oh, Skylar I'm so sorry."
I sniffled and looked up at him and did the only thing I thought would numb the pain. I kissed him. A deep, soul searching kiss that rocked me to the bones. When I pulled away we were both breathless.
"Now you know why I've been secretive, now you know why I was suicidal, now you know why my Mom and Dad are the way they are." I said in between breaths.
"Skylar look at me."
I complied.
" I see you. I do see a beautiful, confident, and sexy as hell woman. I don't see a fragile, broken girl even though I know you've been through hell. You are still utterly perfect and I will do whatever I can to make sure you believe that forever." He stated.
I pushed him back onto the bed and straddled his body. I looked down on him and my hair framed my face.
"Thank you for seeing me." and with that I sealed my lips to his, this time with a hunger so imminent I could feel it radiating through my body. The connection so deep. His hands grabbed my waist and flipped me over so I was on my back now. He stopped, searching my eyes. I nodded in silent agreement. He grabbed my tank top and pulled it over my head, tossing it blindly onto the floor. His lips came to my neck and kissed and sucked. His hands unclasped my bra strap. His eyes were so lustful.
"You. Are. So. Beautiful." He said between kisses.
His hands roamed my breasts and he watched as my nipples budded into tight pebbles. He licked his lips and latched onto my breast. I cried out in the ecstasy of the feeling, shock waves of pleasure shooting to my most intimate place. I found the bottom of his shirt and pulled it over his head, all the while my eyes roaming his rock hard abs. In one swift motion he pulled my shorts and panties off. He was only wearing boxers at this point and it was easy to slide them off. Our clothes landed in a mass pile all over the floor. He looked into my eyes and then kissed my deeply, his tongue roaming my mouth. When he pulled back he moved down, trailing kisses down my stomach until he met my core. At this point I was writhing with sensation, I've never experienced the intimacy with a man. My first time had been in a drunken haze and I barely remembered the guy's last name.
His tongue laved at my core and I shook with pleasure. Suddenly he met my lips and I could taste my arousal. As his tongue expertly mated with mine he plunged two fingers into my core and I cried out with pleasure.
"Oh Cole, God yes." I moaned.
He lined up his stiff cock with my center and I finally got a good look. He was huge, but perfect at the same time. He inched into me and I moaned in pleasure.
"Cole, yes, more, please"
And with that he plunged as deep as he could and I cried out. The feeling of him inside me was like nothing I had ever felt before and soon I could feel my looming orgasm.
"Oh, I'm so close" I cried.
He picked up the pace, slamming into me and I could feel him stiffen. With that we both went over the edge and I screamed in blissful pleasure. He pulled out of me and we lied there in post-coital bliss.
"We didn't use a condom." He said regretfully.
"No worries, I'm on the pill. You're clean right?"
"Yes" he stated.
"Good, because I love the feel of you." I said with a smile
Cole sat up and grabbed our clothes from the ground, handing me mine as he went.
"So, if you don't mind me asking, did you ever find out who the other driver was?"
"The only thing we ever found out was the make of the car and partial plates. I'll never forget it, it was an old white buick with the first three digits of the plates at W29. At least that's what Annabeth's friend who was driving said. That's all he could remember." " It's sick that they are still out there." I finished.
A concerned look flashed in Cole's eyes, and as quickly as it came, it was gone.
"Come here." He motioned me towards him and I folded myself in his arms.
Cole's POV
After a few minutes I could hear the sounds of her even breathing. My mind; however, was racing. It had to be a coincidence. He was home that night wasn't he? Oh god, it couldn't be. All I knew, was that I had to find out.
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Alright, so I skipped the entire mature content part as soon as I suspected it 'cause just... *pukes* LOL. Anyways.
So her older sister passed away. Not the younger. Okay, I see. And Cole somehow knows about this? Because in his POV, he says he has to "find out". I'm watching you, Cole Wright... *narrows eyes*
Punctuation mark at the end. You missed some periods in this chapter quite a lot, too, so you may wanna skim over this bit and do some editing.
That's the only thing I found to point out. Great job with this chapter, and of course, if you've got any questions, feel free to ask. Time o shimmy over to the next chapter! I hope you found this review useful.
Keep on writing!
~Liberty
I'm so sorry that was posted twice!
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Alright, so I skipped the entire mature content part as soon as I suspected it 'cause just... *pukes* LOL. Anyways.
So her older sister passed away. Not the younger. Okay, I see. And Cole somehow knows about this? Because in his POV, he says he has to "find out". I'm watching you, Cole Wright... *narrows eyes*
Punctuation mark at the end. You missed some periods in this chapter quite a lot, too, so you may wanna skim over this bit and do some editing.
That's the only thing I found to point out. Great job with this chapter, and of course, if you've got any questions, feel free to ask. Time o shimmy over to the next chapter! I hope you found this review useful.
Keep on writing!
~Liberty
I see you. I do see a beautiful, confident, and sexy as hell woman. I don't see a fragile, broken girl even though I know you've been through hell. You are still utterly perfect and I will do whatever I can to make sure you believe that forever." He stated.
This line felt a little cheesy to me.
How do you feel about this?
"I see you. Beautiful. Confident. Strong. You've been through hell and back, and yet your perfect. I will do whatever I can to make sure you believe that forever," He said.
I'm a guy. I think it's important you know that if your considering a broad target audience. It was a little too emotional for me. But considering this fact you can understand that my opinion probably doesn't matter. Please do consider the dialogue suggestion though it was the one thing (other than the penis comment) that didn't sit well with me.
I love romance stories. Like Titanic, Atonement, The English Patient, and A Farewell to Arms. Love is tragic, and if Cole really did kill her sister he's a jerk. And that's a sad love story. That's good, from a story point of view all love should end tragically. I would just recommend you try to really hide this fact. Instead of that concerned look he gives at the end show something else, maybe during sex, or while she tells him the story. Something low-key that the reader might perceive as anything. Hide your clues, we aren't supposed to see them or even suspect. Until you tell us then everything makes sense.
It's good, and your passionate about the story. Take care of these special characters you've got here. Don't try to get fancy with the tags, a simple he said she said works fine.
Condom
(don't say you are clean right? its a little too late to ask, if she cared at all she would've said something sooner.)
"We didn't use a condom."
"No, I love the feel of you," she smiled. He looked a little nervous. "Don't worry. I'm on the pill," she said massaging his chest.
Cole sat up and grabbed our clothes from the ground, handing me mine as he went. "Did you ever find out who the other driver was?" (two things if he is guilty of this then why did he ask her this? If she did know would she have just slept with him? Also don't make him ask permission they just had sex I'd consider it the last boundary a couple can have.)
People will read this, finish it.
Sorry, I'm so late to reply. That's how I am lol. I'm glad you are a guy reading this, I like to cater to both audiences and your feedback is appreciated. Also, I think you'll be surprised at what will happen. But that's all I'll say (;
Is there another chapter out yet?
I just put one out yesterday!
Hey hey!
. Anyway this isn't going to be as long as normal reviews of mine but that does not mean that I loved it any less.
So, you're very descriptive
I have two things to say.
1. If Cole was the drunk driver.... Oh my goodness I might just die!!!! I need to know... it's like I almost need to know as bad as skylar!!!
2. They are soooooo cute! The feelings they have for each other are so visible! You have done an amazing job!
I cannot wait to read more! Keep writing please!!!
Stay classy and write on.
-Annaclare
Hi! I hope that doesn't ruin the story for you. I wanted to showcase their love in a more intimate way. And I've got so many things up my sleeve for the next chapter it's not even funny %uD83D%uDE48
That did not ruin the story nd i could tell what you were doing
And i cant wait to read more!