The power of humanity is strong.
We started out small, but we grew.
Through our history there was many disasters and block ways.
We were push back and forced on our knees, but we never give up.
We never stop fighting.
We get back up and keep moving.
Always remembering our past our losses the sadness, and used it as hope to keep on moving.
Looking for a better tomorrow.
We rise above the destruction and build anew.
We tried to be stopped by the evil chaos.
Each generation faces its own challenge and step up to beat it.
Diseases try to stop us but we find cures and solution.
Animals attack us every day but we raise defenses and protect ourselves.
We tame them to help us.
Heroes rise up and help the weak.
You may not know it but even the person next to u can be a heroes or u yourself.
We fight each other in wars but peace always comeback after.
Nothing can bring us down.
Each day we advance.
Each day we grow stronger.
Each day we grow smarter.
Humanity cannot be brought down
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hi there! its just me dropping for a quick review!
The power of humanity is strong.
i'll try and make it short, but at the same time include all the necessary details
including all the things i liked and dislikedand the things you can use some suggestion in!i'll go topic wise as usual... so here we go....
THEME
*claps* amazing theme man! i really liked the idea of "humanity" never losing no matter how much we fight or try to take over each other but at the end we humans always find harmony! i havent really read much on this topic so yeah again, hatts off for your uniqueness
FLOW
flow was fine. well its a free- verse poem...so there isnt much i can comment on that...
GRAMMER AND PUNCUATIONS
i'm really glad to see that you used some puncuations, but i still think there are some errors with them, which you would like to mend.
i seriously suggest that you pay more attention on your tenses... seriously you made quite some mistakes when it came to it...
EDITING ZONE
well your work can use some editing...so here is somethings i would like to suggest!
Spoiler
We started out small, but we grew along (add this here? i think it improves the flow)
Through our history there were many disasters and block ways.
We were pushed back and forced on our knees, but we never gave up.
We never stop fighting.
We always (add this here?) get back up and keep moving.
Always remembering our past ,
our losses the sadness, (divide the line)
and used it as hope to keep on moving.
Looking for a better tomorrow.
We rise above the destruction and build anew.
We tried to be stopped by the evil chaos.
Each generation faces its own challenge and step up to beat it.
Diseases try to stop us but we find cures and solution.
Animals attack us every day but we raise defenses and protect ourselves,
we tame them to help us.
Heroes rise up and help the weak.
You may not know it , but even the person next to u can be a hero or u yourself.
We fight each other in wars but peace always comeback after.
Nothing can bring us down.
Each day we advance.
Each day we grow stronger.
Each day we grow smarter.
Humanity cannot be brought down
okay so thats it for now... i hope this helped
even a bithoping to see more of your works in the future...
phangirl~
Heyaa, gammagamerale!!
This is Eros here to review your beautiful work!!
So, let us begin the review by commenting on the title. The title, " Humanity " is very apt, catchy, attractive, captivating, and short. These are the characteristics of a good title.
The next thing which comes, is the main theme and the main idea which forms the basis of the poem. The main theme of this poem is very unique and beautiful. You have explained the power of humanity, the struggles which you, me, and all of us face, and how we keep on fighting them. There is nothing strong which can bring down humanity.
I like you have described everything.
Then the next thing of the review, is the choice of set of the words. The set of words which you have used gives a sociological effect to the poem. I liked this.
Then the next thing, is my views about the poem.
Make it we were pushed back...
Now, the things which I loved the most about this poem:
1) I liked the basic theme of the poem.
2) I liked your way of expressing your thoughts.
3) I liked how the poem flowed. It has a good flow.
4) I liked your style of writing. It is unique and easy to understand.
Rest, I loved this poetry.
Now, I would just end up my review by the following lines:
Keep writing...
Never cease...
Because we all love to keep reading such awesome works!!
Have a Great day/ evening!